Perfume— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear but a bit repetitive and could be more concise. Try to avoid repeating the same idea and use linking words to make your response smoother. Also, use more natural phrasing such as "I prefer to stay natural" instead of "I like to stay naturally."

例: No, I don't really like perfumes because I prefer to stay natural. Also, I think perfumes can sometimes harm the skin and damage clothes.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be more fluent and natural. Avoid awkward phrases like "stay on in my natural scent." Use linking words like "but" to connect ideas and make your answer more coherent.

例: No, I don't use perfume every day because I prefer my natural scent. However, I do wear perfume occasionally, especially when I attend weddings or parties.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but could be improved by using more precise vocabulary and better sentence structure. For example, say "sometimes" instead of "sometime" and use articles correctly. Also, provide a reason why perfume can be a good or less suitable gift.

例: Yes, I think giving perfume as a gift is a nice idea because it feels personal. However, sometimes other gifts like books or electronic devices might be more practical.

提案: Your answer has some grammatical errors and hesitations that affect clarity. Avoid repeating phrases like "I wanna" and use correct verb tenses. Also, be more specific and organized in your response by using linking words such as "some" and "however."

例: Perfumes come in a wide range of prices. Some are affordable, but perfumes from big brands like Gucci or Flora tend to be quite expensive.

× I like to stay naturally and perfumes are not very good for skin and clothes, so I am not very fond of perfumes.

✓ I like to stay natural and perfumes are not very good for the skin and clothes, so I am not very fond of perfumes.

The word 'naturally' is an adverb, but here an adjective 'natural' is needed to describe the state of 'stay'. Also, 'for skin and clothes' requires the definite article 'the' before 'skin' to specify the skin in general.

× I don't use perfume in my daily life because I like to stay on in my natural scent.

✓ I don't use perfume in my daily life because I like to stay in my natural scent.

The preposition 'on' is unnecessary and incorrect after 'stay' in this context. The correct phrase is 'stay in my natural scent'.

× Yes, in my opinion giving perfume as a gift is a very nice idea, but sometime it can be replaced with other better gifts like a book or a electronic device.

✓ Yes, in my opinion giving perfume as a gift is a very nice idea, but sometimes it can be replaced with other better gifts like a book or an electronic device.

The word 'sometime' should be 'sometimes' to indicate frequency. Also, 'a electronic device' is incorrect because 'electronic' starts with a vowel sound, so 'an' should be used instead of 'a'.

× Well, they came, they come in many different ranges of price.

✓ Well, they come in many different price ranges.

The phrase 'they came' is incorrect here because the speaker is talking about perfumes in general, so present tense 'they come' is appropriate. Also, 'ranges of price' is better expressed as 'price ranges'.

× So I wanna, I wanna say all the perfumes are very expensive.

✓ So I want to say that not all perfumes are very expensive.

The informal contraction 'wanna' should be replaced with 'want to' in formal speech. Also, the original sentence implies all perfumes are expensive, which contradicts the next sentence. Adding 'not all' clarifies the meaning.