Perfume— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear but could be more natural and concise. Avoid repeating phrases like 'I do' and try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, try to limit your answer to 3-4 sentences for better effectiveness.

例: Yes, I love perfume, especially during cooler seasons. However, in hot weather, I prefer light and fruity scents because strong perfumes can be overwhelming.

提案: Try to avoid filler words like 'umm' and repeated phrases. Make your answer more structured by giving a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details using linking words. This will make your response sound more natural and fluent.

例: Yes, I use perfume regularly, but during hot summers, I usually prefer body lotion because it's lighter. Nevertheless, I still wear perfume occasionally when I want to feel refreshed.

提案: Your answer is good but could be improved by using linking words to connect your ideas and by correcting some grammar mistakes. Also, try to be more specific about why it's difficult to choose perfumes as gifts.

例: I usually avoid buying perfume as a gift because everyone has different scent preferences, making it hard to choose the right one. However, for family members whose tastes I know well, I don't mind buying perfume.

提案: Try to form complete sentences and use linking words to make your answer coherent. Also, avoid repeating words like 'range' and be more precise in your vocabulary.

例: The price of perfumes varies a lot. Some are very expensive, but there are also affordable options available, so you can find perfumes in a wide range of prices.

× Depends on a perfume.

✓ Depends on the perfume.

The phrase 'Depends on a perfume' is incorrect because 'depends on' requires a definite noun or pronoun to specify what is being depended on. Using 'a perfume' is indefinite and vague here. The correct form is 'Depends on the perfume' to refer to perfume in general or a specific perfume. This is a singular and plural issue related to article usage with singular nouns.

× There are all range in a range different price range.

✓ There is a whole range of different price ranges.

The original sentence has incorrect preposition usage and awkward phrasing. 'There are all range in a range different price range' is ungrammatical. The correct phrase is 'There is a whole range of different price ranges.' This corrects the preposition 'of' after 'range' and uses singular 'is' because 'range' is singular. It also clarifies the meaning by adding 'whole' and pluralizing 'price ranges'.