Perfume— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời cần tự nhiên hơn và tránh lặp từ, đồng thời nên có cấu trúc rõ ràng với câu chủ đề và chi tiết hỗ trợ. Bạn nên dùng từ vựng phù hợp và tránh dùng từ không chính xác như 'like as many girl and woman'.

例: Yes, I like perfume just like many other women. I enjoy wearing scents because they make me feel more confident at work and help me leave a good impression on others.

提案: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác như 'some college said' hay 'the sense which was not very inappropriate'. Bạn nên dùng liên từ để kết nối ý và giải thích rõ hơn.

例: I used to wear perfume every day, but recently some colleagues mentioned that the scent was a bit strong for them. Therefore, I have stopped using it daily.

提案: Câu trả lời cần chính xác hơn về ngữ pháp và từ vựng, tránh lỗi như 'I used to live as it as a gift'. Bạn nên trình bày rõ ràng, có câu chủ đề và chi tiết hỗ trợ, dùng liên từ để mạch lạc.

例: Yes, of course. I have given perfume as a gift to my friends and teachers before. However, since perfumes can be quite expensive, I usually choose special occasions to give them.

提案: Câu trả lời cần tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và phát âm, đồng thời nên dùng từ vựng chính xác hơn như 'Chanel' thay vì 'Cha Chanel'. Bạn nên tổ chức câu trả lời rõ ràng với câu chủ đề và chi tiết hỗ trợ có liên kết.

例: There is a wide range of perfumes available. Some are affordable and targeted at younger people, but I prefer big brands like Dior or Chanel, which tend to be quite expensive.

× I like perfume like as many girl and woman

✓ I like perfume like many girls and women

The nouns 'girl' and 'woman' should be plural ('girls' and 'women') to agree with 'many', which indicates more than one. This is a singular and plural issue.

× the perfume make us feel more confident in workplace

✓ the perfume makes us feel more confident in the workplace

The verb 'make' should be in third person singular form 'makes' to agree with the singular subject 'perfume'. Also, 'workplace' needs the definite article 'the'. This correction addresses verb form and article usage.

× to reap good impressions

✓ to make a good impression

The phrase 'reap good impressions' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'make a good impression'. This is an incorrect use of prepositions and collocations.

× I used to use the perfume as a use perfume every day

✓ I used to use perfume every day

The phrase 'as a use perfume' is incorrect and redundant. 'Used to use perfume every day' correctly expresses past habitual action. This is a past tense issue and sentence structure problem.

× some college said that they feel the sense which was not very inappropriate

✓ some colleagues said that they felt the scent was inappropriate

'College' should be 'colleagues' (people), and 'sense' should be 'scent' (smell). Also, 'feel' should be past tense 'felt' to match 'said'. The phrase 'not very inappropriate' is confusing; 'inappropriate' alone suffices. This is incorrect use of pronouns and vocabulary.

× So I stopped using every day

✓ So I stopped using it every day

The verb 'stopped' is correctly in past tense, but the object 'it' (perfume) is missing. This is a past tense issue with sentence completeness.

× I used to live as it as a gift for my friend and my teacher

✓ I used to give it as a gift to my friend and my teacher

The verb 'live' is incorrect here; it should be 'give'. Also, 'as it as a gift' is incorrect; correct phrase is 'give it as a gift'. This is a past tense and sentence structure issue.

× so it really depends on occasions where I can give that for people

✓ so it really depends on the occasions when I can give that to people

The phrase 'depends on occasions where' should be 'depends on the occasions when'. Also, 'give that for people' should be 'give that to people'. This is incorrect use of prepositions.

× Are there are a wide range of perfume?

✓ Is there a wide range of perfume?

The sentence incorrectly uses 'Are there are'. The correct form is 'Is there' because 'a wide range' is singular. This is a 'there be' issue and subject-verb agreement.

× a wide range of perfume

✓ a wide range of perfumes

When referring to multiple types, 'perfumes' (plural) is more appropriate than 'perfume' (uncountable or singular). This is a singular and plural issue.

× Some for younger people, uh, are less expensive

✓ Some, for younger people, are less expensive

Commas are needed to set off the phrase 'for younger people' as a non-restrictive clause. This is a punctuation and preposition usage issue.

× I prefer the uh, big brands like Dior or Cha Chanel for adults that is very expensive

✓ I prefer big brands like Dior or Chanel for adults; they are very expensive

'Cha Chanel' is incorrect; it should be 'Chanel'. Also, 'that is very expensive' refers to plural 'brands', so 'they are' is correct. This is incorrect use of adjectives and pronouns.