Perfume— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，建议使用更地道的表达方式，并且避免重复和冗余。可以简洁明了地表达不喜欢香水的原因。

例: No, I don't like perfume because it often makes me feel sick and gives me headaches.

提案: 回答不够连贯，语法和用词错误较多，建议简洁直接地回答问题，并用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: No, as I mentioned before, I don't use perfume daily because it makes me feel unwell. However, I might occasionally try a small amount.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不完整，建议使用完整句子并且避免重复，表达更清晰。

例: Yes, I often buy perfume as a gift for my friends and family because I think it is an elegant present that suits most women.

提案: 回答中语法混乱，表达不清晰，建议简洁明了地表达观点，避免重复和无意义的词汇。

例: Some perfumes are very expensive, but in my country, China, there are many affordable options that smell good.

× No, I don't like perfume because perfume will make me have a sense of sick and I always had a few handic when I smelled of perfume.

✓ No, I don't like perfume because perfume will make me feel sick and I always have a few headaches when I smell perfume.

这里的错误是动词用法错误，'make me have a sense of sick' 应改为 'make me feel sick'，因为 'make' 后面接动词时用动词原形。'had a few handic' 应为 'have a few headaches'，'handic' 不是正确单词，且时态应与现在时态保持一致。

× No, like I have said I don't like perfume and I feel sick when I smelled perfect so I never use perfume in my daily life but a very small part of perfume, maybe I can pick it.

✓ No, like I have said, I don't like perfume and I feel sick when I smell perfume, so I never use perfume in my daily life, but maybe I can pick a very small amount of perfume.

'smelled' 应改为 'smell'，因为这里描述的是一般现在时的习惯动作，动词应使用原形。'perfect' 应为 'perfume'。句子结构也需调整以更通顺。

× No, like I have said I don't like perfume and I feel sick when I smelled perfect so I never use perfume in my daily life but a very small part of perfume, maybe I can pick it.

✓ No, like I have said, I don't like perfume and I feel sick when I smell perfume, so I never use perfume in my daily life, but maybe I can pick a very small amount of perfume.

'smelled of perfume' 中 'of' 用法错误，正确表达应为 'smell perfume'，动词后直接接宾语。

× Yes, I often buy perfume as a gift for my friends and family because I think the perfume is a very elegant gift for most part of woman and.

✓ Yes, I often buy perfume as a gift for my friends and family because I think perfume is a very elegant gift for most women.

'most part of woman' 应改为 'most women'，这里需要复数形式表示大多数女性。

× Yes, I often buy perfume as a gift for my friends and family because I think the perfume is a very elegant gift for most part of woman and. And as a gift, it's very it will fit to most of people.

✓ Yes, I often buy perfume as a gift for my friends and family because I think perfume is a very elegant gift for most women. And as a gift, it will fit most people.

'fit to most of people' 中 'to' 和 'of' 用法错误，正确表达为 'fit most people'。

× No, umm part I know a part of perfect is very, very, it's uh, it's expensive very much.

✓ No, umm, I know some perfumes are very, very expensive.

'a part of perfect' 用法错误，应使用 'some perfumes' 来表示部分香水。

× But in China, in my country, umm, there is a lot of uh, cheap perfume.

✓ But in China, in my country, umm, there are a lot of cheap perfumes.

'a lot of' 后面接可数名词时应使用复数形式，'perfume' 应改为 'perfumes'。且主语复数时谓语动词应为 'are'。

× I can buy it and maybe some of them it's very test.

✓ I can buy them and maybe some of them have a very good scent.

'buy it' 指代不明确，'perfumes' 是复数，应使用 'buy them'。'it's very test' 语法错误，改为 'have a very good scent' 更合适。

× It's have a test test view.

✓ They have a good fragrance.

'test test view' 不是正确表达，应使用 'good fragrance' 来描述香水的气味。