Perfume— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时应避免语法错误，如“when I working”应为“when I am working”。句子结构较为简单，建议使用更自然流畅的表达，并且避免重复表达“perfume”。

例: No, I don't usually wear perfume because as a student, I prefer to keep things simple. However, I might start using it when I begin working in a company.

提案: 回答中应注意句子连贯性和语法准确，如“in classroom”应为“in the classroom”。建议使用连接词使表达更流畅，并具体说明为什么香水的味道让你不舒服。

例: No, I don't use perfume daily because I go to school every day. In the classroom, strong scents can be distracting and uncomfortable for me.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和重复词汇，如“last last”。建议简化句子结构，避免口头语“MMM umm”，并使用连接词使表达更自然。

例: Yes, I have a friend named Amy who loves perfume. I bought her a perfume for her birthday last year, and she was very happy.

提案: 回答中应避免口头语“MMM umm”，并注意名词复数形式，如“Some perfume”应为“Some perfumes”。建议使用更准确的词汇和句子结构表达价格差异。

例: I think the price of perfumes varies. Some perfumes sold by small businesses are quite affordable, but those in big shopping malls tend to be expensive.

× No I don't because I am a student right now so I think I am not suitable to use some perfume but maybe when I working in the companies I will use this thing.

✓ No, I don't because I am a student right now, so I think I am not suitable to use perfume, but maybe when I work in a company, I will use it.

这里“when I working”中的“working”用法错误，应该用动词原形“work”，因为“when”引导的时间状语从句中动词用一般现在时。建议掌握时间状语从句中动词时态的用法。

× No I don't because I am a student right now so I think I am not suitable to use some perfume but maybe when I working in the companies I will use this thing.

✓ No, I don't because I am a student right now, so I think I am not suitable to use perfume, but maybe when I work in a company, I will use it.

“the companies”这里用复数不合适，应该用单数“a company”，表示将来某个公司。建议注意可数名词单复数的正确使用。

× No I don't because I am a student right now so I think I am not suitable to use some perfume but maybe when I working in the companies I will use this thing.

✓ No, I don't because I am a student right now, so I think I am not suitable to use perfume, but maybe when I work in a company, I will use it.

“use some perfume”中“some”不合适，通常说“use perfume”表示使用香水，不用加“some”。建议熟悉不可数名词前的量词用法。

× No, I don't because I go to school every day and in classroom I think the perfume has strong scents.

✓ No, I don't because I go to school every day, and in the classroom, I think perfume has a strong scent.

“in classroom”缺少冠词，应该是“in the classroom”；“the perfume has strong scents”中“scents”应为单数“scent”，因为这里指香水的气味整体。建议注意冠词和名词单复数的正确使用。

× No, I don't because I go to school every day and in classroom I think the perfume has strong scents.

✓ No, I don't because I go to school every day, and in the classroom, I think perfume has a strong scent.

“in classroom”缺少定冠词“the”，应为“in the classroom”。建议注意特定场所前冠词的使用。

× MMM yes umm I have a friend her name is Amy, she like perfume very much and last last her birthday I brought one perfume for her, she is really happy.

✓ MMM yes, umm, I have a friend. Her name is Amy. She likes perfume very much, and on her last birthday, I bought a perfume for her. She was really happy.

“she like perfume”中“like”应为第三人称单数“likes”；“last last her birthday”表达重复且不正确，应为“on her last birthday”；“brought one perfume”中“one perfume”不自然，改为“a perfume”；“she is really happy”时态应与过去事件一致，改为“she was really happy”。建议注意主谓一致、时间状语表达和冠词使用。

× MMM yes umm I have a friend her name is Amy, she like perfume very much and last last her birthday I brought one perfume for her, she is really happy.

✓ MMM yes, umm, I have a friend. Her name is Amy. She likes perfume very much, and on her last birthday, I bought a perfume for her. She was really happy.

“she like perfume”中动词“like”应加-s，变为“likes”，以符合第三人称单数形式。

× MMM yes umm I have a friend her name is Amy, she like perfume very much and last last her birthday I brought one perfume for her, she is really happy.

✓ MMM yes, umm, I have a friend. Her name is Amy. She likes perfume very much, and on her last birthday, I bought a perfume for her. She was really happy.

“brought”是过去式，正确；但“she is really happy”应改为过去时“she was really happy”，因为描述的是过去的事情。建议注意时态一致性。

× MMM I think different perfumes have different, umm, price.

✓ MMM I think different perfumes have different prices.

“different price”应为复数“different prices”，因为不同香水有不同的价格。建议注意可数名词单复数的正确使用。

× Some perfume in some small businesses is really cheap, but in big shopping mall it is really expensive.

✓ Some perfumes in some small businesses are really cheap, but in big shopping malls, they are really expensive.

“Some perfume”应为复数“Some perfumes”；“small businesses”复数正确；“big shopping mall”应为复数“big shopping malls”；动词“is”应改为“are”，与复数主语一致。建议注意主谓一致和名词单复数。