Perfume— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时应更自然流畅，避免语法错误，并且用更准确的表达方式。可以简洁直接地表达喜欢程度，并说明原因。

例: I like perfume moderately because I don't use it often. However, I usually apply a little during summer to feel fresh and pleasant.

提案: 回答时应注意语法和表达的准确性，避免重复和不自然的用词。可以用连接词使回答更连贯。

例: I don't wear perfume every day, but during summer, I usually use it two or three times a week to stay fresh.

提案: 回答应更具体，避免模糊表达。用更自然的语言说明为什么选择香水作为礼物，并且注意语法和用词。

例: Yes, I would buy perfume as a gift because it is a popular and safe choice that suits both men and women.

提案: 回答应更简洁且语法正确，使用连接词使句子更流畅。可以具体说明不同价格的原因。

例: It depends on the brand. Some famous perfumes are quite expensive, but there are also many affordable options available.

× Actually just so so because I didn't use it pretty often.

✓ Actually, just so so because I don't use it very often.

这里应该使用一般现在时，因为学生描述的是一个习惯性的动作，而不是过去发生的事情。将'didn't use'改为'don't use'更符合语境。

× Just when in the summer I want to have a good smelling so I use a little bit perfume.

✓ Just in the summer, when I want to smell good, I use a little bit of perfume.

'when in the summer'的顺序不正确，应该调整为'just in the summer, when...'; 'have a good smelling'表达不自然，改为'smell good'；'a little bit perfume'缺少介词，应该是'a little bit of perfume'。

× I don't use Perfume Pretty every day, just in the summer.

✓ I don't use perfume pretty often every day, just in the summer.

'Pretty'用作副词时应放在形容词或副词前修饰频率词，且原句中'pretty'位置不当，且'pretty every day'表达不自然，改为'pretty often'更合适。

× Yes, I will because it's a beautiful gift for whatever, boys and girls.

✓ Yes, I will because it's a beautiful gift for anyone, boys and girls.

'whatever'用法不当，应该用'anyone'表示任何人；另外，'boys and girls'是复数，前面用单数'whatever'不匹配。

× So it's a safety gift for everyone.

✓ So it's a safe gift for everyone.

'safety'是名词，形容词应使用'safe'来修饰名词'gift'。

× There are so many perfumes we can choose today, so some of them with famous batch they are expensive, but there are also many perfumes not very expensive.

✓ There are so many perfumes we can choose from today, so some of them with famous brands are expensive, but there are also many perfumes that are not very expensive.

'choose'后面需要介词'from'；'famous batch'用词错误，应为'famous brands'；句子结构不完整，需补充主语和谓语使句子完整。