Perfume— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Good direct answer with clear opinion and examples. To improve, make sentences slightly shorter and use one linking phrase to connect points (e.g., “for instance” or “on the other hand”). Also correct minor phrasing: use “make me feel more confident” instead of “more attractive” if you mean inner feeling. Aim for precise vocabulary like “fragrance families” or “woody notes.”

例: Yes, I like wearing perfume when I go out, especially fruity scents because they smell fresh and boost my confidence. For instance, fruity fragrances often seem friendly and cheerful, whereas woody notes give a more serious impression.

提案: Good structure and direct answer, but there are contradictions and small grammar errors. You say you wear perfume for school then say strong scents can be distracting — clarify whether you use light scents daily and stronger ones for events. Fix grammar: “helps me feel more confident” and “shows respect to the host.” Add a linking word like “however” to contrast everyday use with special occasions.

例: It depends on the occasion. For everyday activities or school I usually wear a very light scent because strong perfumes can be distracting; however, I put on a stronger fragrance for special events like a friend’s birthday or a wedding because it helps me feel more confident and shows respect to the host.

提案: Strong, natural answer with a clear example and appropriate detail. To improve further, add a linking phrase to emphasize the reason and vary vocabulary (e.g., “suits their personality” instead of “reflect”). You could mention how you choose brand or packaging as an extra specific detail.

例: Absolutely. I often buy perfume as a gift because a scent can suit someone’s personality. For example, for a gentle, cheerful friend I’d pick a light, fruity fragrance because it feels fresh and upbeat; I might also choose a pretty bottle to make the gift more personal.

提案: Clear and specific answer with a reason and example price — very effective. To improve, add a linking word like “mostly” or “for example” before the reasons, and you could mention alternatives like niche brands or good quality affordable options to show balance.

例: Yes, some perfumes are very expensive; for example, luxury brands can cost up to CN¥1000. This is mostly because they use rare ingredients and fine craftsmanship, and the brand prestige increases the price; however, there are also affordable quality options available.

× I really wear perfume for school or everyday activities because strong scents can be distracting.

✓ I usually avoid wearing perfume for school or everyday activities because strong scents can be distracting.

The original sentence is grammatically acceptable, but the meaning contradicts the context. The student likely intended to express that they do not wear perfume for school because strong scents distract others. Replacing 'I really wear perfume' with 'I usually avoid wearing perfume' corrects the intended meaning while keeping correct verb + -ing usage. Suggestion: use 'avoid' + verb-ing to indicate not doing an action (e.g., 'avoid wearing').

× ...because it helps me for more confident and shows respect for the host.

✓ ...because it helps me feel more confident and shows respect for the host.

The phrase 'helps me for more confident' is incorrect. After 'helps' we need the base verb or 'to' + base verb: 'helps me feel' or 'helps me to feel.' Using 'feel' (bare infinitive) is correct. This fixes misuse of verb forms and produces natural English. Suggestion: use 'helps me feel' or 'helps me to feel' + adjective.

× Do you like perfume?

✓ Do you like perfume?

There is an extra space between 'like' and 'perfume' which is a typographical/article spacing issue. Removing the extra space yields correct punctuation. Suggestion: ensure no unintended spaces around words.

× For example, fruity scents feel friendly and cheerful, while woody scents seem more serious.

✓ For example, fruity scents feel friendly and cheerful, while woody scents seem more serious.

This sentence is grammatically correct in present tense and matches the context. No grammatical correction needed; included to indicate it was checked and is acceptable.

× I sometimes buy perfume as a gift since different fragrances can reflect a person's personality.

✓ I sometimes buy perfume as a gift since different fragrances can reflect a person's personality.

Sentence is grammatically correct in present simple tense and matches context; no correction needed.