Teacher— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Jawaban Anda sudah cukup baik, tetapi Anda bisa membuatnya lebih alami dan efektif dengan menghindari pengulangan dan menggunakan kalimat yang lebih terstruktur. Misalnya, gunakan kata penghubung untuk mengaitkan ide dan hindari kalimat yang terlalu panjang atau berulang.

例: Yes, my favourite teacher is my biology teacher because she explains the materials clearly and creates a comfortable learning environment. Recently, I attended her class again and really enjoyed it, which helped me understand the subject better.

提案: Jawaban Anda sudah cukup jelas dan terstruktur, namun Anda bisa memperbaiki kelancaran dengan menggunakan kata penghubung yang tepat dan menghindari pengulangan kata seperti 'because' dan 'so'.

例: To be honest, I'm not in touch with my primary school teacher because I don't have their contact information and I rarely visit my old school. However, we had a good relationship, and I would like to reconnect and see how they are doing.

提案: Jawaban Anda sudah baik dan cukup spesifik. Untuk membuatnya lebih alami, Anda bisa menggabungkan kalimat dengan kata penghubung yang tepat dan menghindari pengulangan kata seperti 'and'.

例: My favourite teacher helped me by encouraging me to truly understand the subject rather than just memorizing the materials. This approach made learning more meaningful and changed my perspective on education.

提案: Jawaban Anda mengandung beberapa kesalahan tata bahasa dan kata yang kurang tepat seperti 'patients' seharusnya 'patience' dan 'forcing' yang tidak sesuai konteks. Perbaiki penggunaan kosakata dan struktur kalimat agar lebih jelas dan alami.

例: Unfortunately, I don't want to be a teacher because I don't think I have the right qualities for the job, such as patience. Besides, I'm more interested in pursuing challenging careers, like becoming a doctor or a scientist, where I can make a significant impact on people's lives.

× she teaches biology 1.

✓ she teaches biology.

The number '1' after 'biology' is unnecessary and incorrect in this context. It should be removed to correctly refer to the subject 'biology'.

× she makes it easier to understand materials

✓ she makes it easier to understand the material

'Materials' is plural, but in this context, 'material' as an uncountable noun is more appropriate to refer to the content being taught. Using 'the material' is correct here.

× I understand the materials very well.

✓ I understand the material very well.

Similar to the previous sentence, 'material' should be singular and uncountable here to refer to the content, so 'the material' is correct.

× I didn't have their contacts

✓ I didn't have their contact information

'Contacts' is incorrect here; the correct phrase is 'contact information' or 'contact details' when referring to someone's means of communication.

× I rarely visit my primary school so that's why I'm not in touch with my primary school teacher.

✓ I rarely visit my primary school, so that's why I'm not in touch with my primary school teacher.

A comma is needed before 'so' to correctly join the two independent clauses.

× catch up on how they are doing.

✓ catch up on how he or she is doing.

Since 'primary school teacher' is singular, the pronoun should be singular 'he or she' instead of plural 'they'.

× the subject I learned instead of just memorizing the materials she provided.

✓ the subject I learned instead of just memorizing the material she provided.

Again, 'material' should be singular and uncountable here to refer to the content provided.

× I don't think that I have the right qualities for the job such as patients.

✓ I don't think that I have the right qualities for the job such as patience.

'Patients' is a plural noun meaning sick people; the correct word here is 'patience', which means the ability to wait calmly.

× I'm more interested in forcing challenging careers, for example, becoming a doctor or a scientist, where I can make a significant impact on people's.

✓ I'm more interested in pursuing challenging careers, for example, becoming a doctor or a scientist, where I can make a significant impact on people.

The verb 'forcing' is incorrect here; 'pursuing' fits the context better. Also, 'people's' is possessive and incomplete; it should be 'people'.