Teacher— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は直接的で内容も含まれていますが、文法の誤りや冗長な表現が見られます。例えば、「who was the literature teacher of my school」は「my school's literature teacher」と簡潔にできます。また、「he said that I could be a baseball player in the future」は少し不自然なので、より自然な表現に改善しましょう。

例: Yes, my favourite teacher was Mr. Otsuka, my school's literature teacher. He always encouraged me to study hard and once told me I had the potential to become a baseball player in the future.

提案: 回答に多くのためらいの言葉（"umm", "uh"）が含まれており、文法的にも誤りがあります。例えば、「we hold parties」は時制が間違っています。また、「with a member of the primary school」も不明瞭です。より明確で自然な表現を心がけましょう。

例: No, I'm not in touch with my primary school teacher now. However, about ten years ago, we had reunions with some of my primary school classmates, which are some of my most cherished memories.

提案: 回答にためらいの言葉があり、文法的な誤りや不自然な表現があります。例えば、「it makes them very happy and can be encouraged」は意味が不明瞭です。より明確で自然な表現を使い、接続詞を活用して論理的に話しましょう。

例: Mr. Otsuka was very encouraging; he always used positive words with students, which made them feel happy and motivated to do their best.

提案: 回答は意味が伝わりますが、「tags for teachers to do recent years」などの表現が不自然で誤解を招きます。より適切な語彙を使い、文法的に正しい文章を作ることが必要です。

例: No, I don't want to be a teacher because nowadays teachers have many responsibilities, such as teaching various subjects, meeting with parents, and supervising extracurricular activities. It seems like a very busy job.

× No, I don't right now.

✓ No, I don't have contact right now.

The original sentence lacks a main verb after 'don't'. In English, 'do not' must be followed by a verb to form a negative sentence. Here, 'have contact' or 'keep in touch' is appropriate to express the intended meaning.

× we hold parties, uh, with a member of the primary school, uh, which was one of the important memories for me.

✓ we held parties with members of the primary school, which was one of the important memories for me.

The verb 'hold' should be in the past tense 'held' to match the past time frame 'ten years ago'. Also, 'a member' should be plural 'members' to indicate multiple people, matching the context.

× he always used very positive words to students and it makes them very happy and can be encouraged.

✓ he always used very positive words to students and it made them very happy and encouraged.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. Since 'used' is past tense, the following verbs should also be in past tense for consistency. 'Makes' should be 'made', and 'can be encouraged' should be 'encouraged' to maintain parallel structure.

× there are many tags for teachers to do recent years.

✓ there are many tasks for teachers to do in recent years.

The word 'tags' is incorrect here; the correct word is 'tasks'. Also, the phrase 'to do recent years' is ungrammatical; it should be 'to do in recent years' to indicate the time frame.

× interview with the parents and attend supervisor cover activities.

✓ interview parents and attend supervisory cover activities.

The phrase 'interview with the parents' is incorrect; it should be 'interview parents' without 'with'. Also, 'supervisor cover activities' is unclear; likely intended is 'supervisory cover activities' as an adjective describing the activities.