Teacher— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more direct and consistent: start with a clear topic sentence naming whether you had a favourite teacher, then give 2–3 specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and contradictory statements (e.g. saying teachers were both kind and strict) by clarifying you liked some teachers for certain reasons and disliked others. Use past tense consistently and limit to 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I did have a favourite teacher in primary school. She was very kind and taught in a way that made learning fun, often using jokes and games so we remembered facts easily. Because she was patient and approachable, I felt comfortable asking questions and learning more.

提案: Answer directly with a clear single sentence stating whether you are in touch, then briefly explain why using one or two supporting details. Avoid unclear idioms and filler words; use correct prepositions and simple structure.

例: No, I'm not in touch with my primary school teachers because I lost contact after moving to a different city and I don't remember their names well.

提案: Start with a direct topic sentence describing the main way the teacher helped, then give two specific examples using linking words like 'for example' or 'for instance'. Replace vague phrases with clear actions and use correct verb forms.

例: My favourite teacher helped me by being very patient and explaining difficult topics slowly. For example, she would repeat lessons using simple examples and stayed after class to give extra help, which encouraged me to keep studying.

提案: Begin with a clear yes/no statement, then give 2 concise reasons using linking words such as 'because' or 'so'. Avoid long lists of complaints; be specific and use correct collocations (e.g. 'handful' → 'handful' isn't used this way; use 'difficult to manage').

例: No, I don't want to be a teacher in the future because I find managing young children's behaviour difficult and I would get frustrated repeating lessons when they have trouble concentrating.

× They had some teachers.

✓ I had some teachers.

The student uses 'They' but the speaker is referring to themselves; this is a pronoun error that causes a singular/plural mismatch in meaning. Replace 'They' with the first-person singular 'I' to match the speaker as the subject. Also ensures agreement with subsequent verbs like 'had.'

× They were really kind and conservative.

✓ They were really kind and conservative.

No grammatical third-person singular verb error remains after correcting the subject in other sentences. The verb 'were' correctly matches the plural subject 'They.' No change required except earlier subject corrections where needed.

× They produced a joyful atmosphere.

✓ They created a joyful atmosphere.

'Produced' is grammatically acceptable but sounds less natural for atmosphere; 'created' is a more natural collocation. This is a word choice/style improvement rather than a strict past participle error, but keeping past simple is correct for describing past habitual actions.

× They sometimes crack jokes and we laugh out loud.

✓ They sometimes cracked jokes and we laughed out loud.

The rest of this paragraph describes past experiences, so verbs should be in past tense for consistency. Change 'crack' and 'laugh' to past simple 'cracked' and 'laughed.' This maintains temporal consistency and correct tense usage.

× It could raise our knowledge.

✓ It could increase our knowledge.

The verb 'raise' is not typically used with 'knowledge.' 'Increase' is the appropriate verb collocation. Also note 'could' expresses possibility; in past habitual context 'helped increase our knowledge' would be more natural, but replacing the verb fixes the preposition/collocation issue.

× They could raise our knowledge and we could communicate with them easily.

✓ They helped increase our knowledge and we could communicate with them easily.

Using 'could raise' twice is awkward. In past context, 'helped increase' expresses the actual effect more clearly. Keep 'we could communicate with them easily' if emphasizing ability; otherwise 'we communicated with them easily' would align with past narrative.

× Some of them were really strict and grumpy.

✓ Some of them were really strict and grumpy.

This sentence correctly uses past tense 'were' to describe past teachers. No change needed.

× We got unnecessary stress.

✓ We experienced unnecessary stress.

'Got unnecessary stress' is understandable but awkward. 'Experienced unnecessary stress' is more natural and idiomatic English. This corrects sentence structure and collocation.

× We had lots of fears on that time, so I liked.

✓ We had a lot of fear at that time, so I disliked it.

Multiple issues: 'lots of fears' is unnatural; use 'a lot of fear' or 'many fears' depending on meaning. Preposition 'on that time' should be 'at that time.' The final clause 'so I liked' conflicts with context (stress and fear) and likely should be 'so I disliked it.' Clarify intended meaning and correct preposition and noun usage.

× Since I have a memory like a thief and I couldn't relate to with them, uh, I didn't name of my primary school teachers.

✓ Because I have a poor memory and I couldn't remember them, I can't recall the names of my primary school teachers.

Problems: 'memory like a thief' is idiomatic but unclear; 'have a poor memory' is clearer. 'Couldn't relate to with them' is incorrect—'relate to' means connect emotionally; here intended 'remember' or 'recall.' 'I didn't name of' is ungrammatical; use 'I can't recall the names of' or 'I don't remember the names of.' Also maintain tense consistency.

× Uh, so uh, we are not in touch with each other.

✓ So, we are not in touch with each other.

The sentence is acceptable present tense if the speaker means currently not in contact. Remove filler words 'uh' for clarity. Keep present simple 'are not in touch' to express current state.

× Actually, I believe that my favorite teachers were really kind and conservative.

✓ Actually, I believe that my favourite teachers were really kind and considerate.

'Conservative' likely wrong word choice; 'considerate' or 'kind' fits better. 'Favourite' spelling can be American 'favorite' or British 'favourite'—maintain consistency. The past tense 'were' is correct for describing past teachers.

× They were really patient, they could repeat lots of subject to memorize them, and if we needed lots of extra helps, they always helped us and also they persuade us to pursue our education together.

✓ They were really patient; they could repeat lots of subjects to help us memorize them, and if we needed extra help, they always helped us and also encouraged us to continue our education.

Errors: 'lots of subject' should be 'lots of subjects' (plural). 'Memorize them' needs clearer purpose 'help us memorize them.' 'Lots of extra helps' is wrong quantifier and count noun—use 'extra help' (uncountable). 'They persuade us' should be past 'they encouraged us.' 'Pursue our education together' is awkward; 'continue our education' is clearer.

× I believe that being a teacher is difficult and demanding job.

✓ I believe that being a teacher is a difficult and demanding job.

Missing indefinite article 'a' before 'difficult and demanding job.' English requires an article before singular countable nouns. Add 'a' to correct the sentence.

× I cannot tolerate different behavior in different person, especially when it comes to children.

✓ I cannot tolerate different behaviour in different people, especially when it comes to children.

'Different person' should be plural 'different people' to match 'different behaviour' across individuals. Also 'behaviour' may be American 'behavior'—maintain consistency. This fixes pronoun/number agreement.

× They are really handful, they cannot concentrate well.

✓ They are really handfuls; they cannot concentrate well.

'Handful' is a noun meaning difficult to manage; as a predicative adjective use 'a handful' or 'handfuls' for plural. Better: 'They are really a handful; they cannot concentrate well.' Correct article usage and noun/adjective form.

× I have to repeat lots of subjects.

✓ I have to repeat many subjects.

'Lots of' is informal but acceptable; 'many subjects' is more appropriate in formal speech. No -ing error here; suggested change improves register and clarity.

× I get upset when they don't memorize them and learn them.

✓ I get upset when they don't memorize or learn them.

Redundant 'and' with two verbs sharing the object can be simplified with 'or' because failing to memorize or learn are similar issues. Use present simple 'get' and 'don't' to express general tendency; tense is appropriate.

× So I don't prefer to be a teacher in the future.

✓ So I don't want to be a teacher in the future.

'Don't prefer to be' is awkward; 'don't want to be' more naturally expresses unwillingness. Future reference 'in the future' is redundant with 'don't want to be' but acceptable. Maintain present simple to express future intention.