Teamwork— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: คำตอบควรชัดเจนและตรงประเด็นมากขึ้น โดยใช้ประโยคที่เป็นธรรมชาติและหลีกเลี่ยงคำที่ไม่ถูกต้อง เช่น 'Tim Burke' ควรเป็น 'teamwork' และใช้โครงสร้างประโยคที่ถูกต้อง เช่น 'I really enjoy teamwork because it makes tasks easier when we collaborate well.'

例: Yes, I really enjoy teamwork because it helps make tasks easier and more efficient. I believe good collaboration and a positive mindset among team members are important for success.

提案: ควรตอบให้ชัดเจนและใช้โครงสร้างประโยคที่ถูกต้อง เช่น เริ่มด้วยประโยคหลักที่ตอบคำถามโดยตรง และใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่ออธิบายเพิ่มเติม เช่น 'Yes, I have teamed up with others at my bank where teamwork is essential. We have a good leader which helps us complete tasks efficiently.'

例: Yes, I have teamed up with others at my bank. Working together is important, and with a good leader, we can complete our tasks successfully.

提案: ควรใช้ประโยคที่สมบูรณ์และชัดเจนมากขึ้น พร้อมใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อเชื่อมโยงความคิด เช่น 'From working in a team, I have learned the importance of professionalism. Even if you have personal feelings, the work must continue and tasks should be completed on time.'

例: From working in a team, I have learned that professionalism is very important. Even if you have personal feelings towards team members, the work must go on and tasks should be finished on time.

提案: ควรใช้โครงสร้างประโยคที่ชัดเจนและใช้คำเชื่อมที่เหมาะสม เช่น 'I dislike that having different perspectives can slow down the work process. However, it is also a good opportunity to learn new things from others.'

例: I dislike that sometimes different perspectives can slow down the work. However, I think it is a good chance to learn new things from other people's viewpoints.

× It helps everything easy because I am a good collaboration in teamwork, so I want everyone to associate with the good mindset.

✓ It helps make everything easy because I am good at collaborating in teamwork, so I want everyone to have a good mindset.

The phrase 'helps everything easy' is incorrect; 'helps make everything easy' is the correct form. 'I am a good collaboration' is wrong because 'collaboration' is a noun; the correct phrase is 'I am good at collaborating'. Also, 'associate with the good mindset' should be 'have a good mindset'. These corrections improve adjective and verb usage.

× So I really love being in.

✓ So I really love being in a team.

The sentence ends abruptly without an object after 'being in'. Adding 'a team' clarifies the meaning and corrects the pronoun usage.

× so it's need to be a good team worker to make a team work and I have a good leader so my task can complete.

✓ so it needs to be a good team worker to make teamwork, and I have a good leader so my tasks can be completed.

'it's need to be' is incorrect; the correct form is 'it needs to be'. Also, 'my task can complete' should be 'my tasks can be completed' to use the passive voice properly. These corrections address modal verb and verb form usage.

× my task can complete.

✓ my tasks can be completed.

The singular 'task' should be plural 'tasks' to match the context of multiple tasks. Also, 'can complete' should be passive 'can be completed'.

× What I've learned from working in a team is professional.

✓ What I've learned from working in a team is to be professional.

'is professional' is incorrect because 'professional' is an adjective; the sentence needs an infinitive phrase 'to be professional' to express the idea properly.

× But the work need to be go on umm it needs to finish tasks on time even you have.

✓ But the work needs to go on. Umm, it needs to finish tasks on time even if you have disagreements.

'need' should be 'needs' to agree with singular 'work'. 'need to be go on' is incorrect; correct is 'needs to go on'. The phrase 'even you have' is incomplete; adding 'even if you have disagreements' clarifies the meaning.

× I would say when we have a different perspectives it makes work quite slowly, but it good to learn new things in other ways so it just one of thing that I can think about.

✓ I would say when we have different perspectives, it makes work quite slow, but it is good to learn new things in other ways, so it's just one of the things that I can think about.

'a different perspectives' is incorrect; 'different perspectives' is correct (no article with plural noun). 'makes work quite slowly' should be 'makes work quite slow' because 'slowly' is an adverb but here an adjective is needed. 'it good' should be 'it is good'. 'just one of thing' should be 'just one of the things'.