Teamwork— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答が繰り返しや冗長な表現を含んでおり、文法的にも不自然な部分があります。より簡潔で明確な表現を心がけ、具体的な理由や例を加えると良いでしょう。

例: Yes, I like teamwork because it helps me achieve common goals efficiently. For example, when I face difficulties, my team members support me and we solve problems together.

提案: 文法の誤りや不自然な表現が多く、内容も曖昧です。文を整理し、具体的な活動内容や経験を明確に述べることが必要です。

例: Yes, during university, I often worked in teams to discuss common problems and recent trade news. We shared ideas and collaborated to find solutions.

提案: 文が不完全で意味が伝わりにくいです。学んだことを明確に述べ、具体的なスキルや経験を説明するようにしましょう。

例: I have learned important communication and teamwork skills, such as understanding each other's roles and completing tasks efficiently together.

提案: 回答が不明瞭で、伝えたい内容がはっきりしません。嫌いな点があれば具体的に述べ、理由や例を加えると良いでしょう。

例: I don't dislike much about teamwork, but sometimes managing time is difficult because we need to agree on schedules with all members.

× Yes, I like teamwork because teamwork can help me achieve the achieve the achieve the goal or destination.

✓ Yes, I like teamwork because teamwork can help me achieve the goal or destination.

The repetition of 'achieve the' is unnecessary and incorrect. It should be stated only once to maintain clarity and grammatical correctness.

× And they help me if I have trouble. They help me remember help me.

✓ And it helps me if I have trouble. It helps me remember.

The pronoun 'they' is incorrect because 'teamwork' is singular and should be referred to as 'it'. Also, the phrase 'help me remember help me' is redundant and should be simplified.

× Yes, during my university students we often discuss, we often pay load of teamwork, teamwork discussion, we talk about all common problem or recent trade news and we share idea and.

✓ Yes, during my university studies we often discuss; we often do a lot of teamwork, teamwork discussions; we talk about common problems or recent trade news and we share ideas.

The word 'students' is incorrect here; it should be 'studies'. 'Pay load' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'do a lot of'. 'Problem' and 'idea' should be plural to match the context. The sentence structure also needs improvement for clarity.

× I learned a communication skill and teamwork teamwork skill especially beyond their how to how to play a role each other or how to finish this task efficiently.

✓ I learned communication skills and teamwork skills, especially how to play roles for each other and how to finish tasks efficiently.

The sentence has redundancy and unclear phrasing. 'Communication skill' and 'teamwork teamwork skill' should be plural. The phrase 'beyond their how to how to play a role each other' is incorrect and should be rephrased for clarity.

× None of my dislike things but is umm, I can't. I can time management because they have to decide the time how the time to.

✓ There is nothing I dislike, but I find time management difficult because we have to decide how to manage the time.

The original sentence is fragmented and uses incorrect pronouns and structure. 'None of my dislike things' is incorrect; it should be 'There is nothing I dislike'. The rest of the sentence is unclear and needs to be rephrased for proper meaning and grammar.