Mirrors— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够自然且有语法错误，表达不够连贯。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，使用更自然的表达方式，并且控制答案长度在5句以内。

例: Yes, I look at myself in the mirror quite often, maybe once every few days. I like to check my skin because I have some acne scars that bother me. Looking in the mirror helps me see if my appearance is neat and tidy.

提案: 回答内容不清晰且有重复，表达混乱。建议直接回答问题，避免重复和语法错误，使用清晰的句子结构。

例: No, I have never bought a mirror myself. Usually, my family provides mirrors at home, so I don't feel the need to buy one.

提案: 回答中有重复和语法错误，表达不够流畅。建议简化句子，避免重复，使用连贯的表达，并且注意语法正确。

例: No, I don't usually carry a mirror with me. Instead, I use my phone to take selfies to check my appearance, which is more convenient.

提案: 回答中有重复和语法错误，表达不够连贯。建议用更简洁的句子表达观点，并且补充具体原因，使内容更丰富。

例: No, I wouldn't use mirrors to decorate my room. According to Chinese beliefs, mirrors can attract negative energy or spirits, so I prefer to avoid them in my room.

× I'm still suffering with those acne, acne scars.

✓ I'm still suffering from acne and acne scars.

这里“acne”是不可数名词，不需要复数形式“those acne”，应直接使用“acne”。另外，介词应为“suffering from”而非“suffering with”。

× And I think this, this phenomenon caused by adolescents has annoyed me a long time.

✓ And I think this phenomenon caused by adolescence has annoyed me for a long time.

句子结构不完整，缺少介词“for”来表示时间段，且“adolescents”应改为不可数名词“adolescence”表示青春期。

× And I have to.

✓ And I have to deal with it.

句子不完整，缺少谓语动词，导致表达不清，应补充完整。

× Have you ever bought mirrors?

✓ Have you ever bought a mirror?

根据上下文，询问是否买过“镜子”，通常用单数形式“a mirror”更合适。

× And usually boys, usually boys don't mind too much on their appearance.

✓ And usually boys don't mind too much about their appearance.

“mind”后应接介词“about”，且“appearance”是不可数名词，不用复数。

× my mirror I, my mirror watch, which I usually carry with me is my mother.

✓ My mirror watch, which I usually carry with me, belongs to my mother.

原句结构混乱，代词使用不当，需调整句子结构使表达清晰。

× I think a boy who take a mirror with himself is so weird.

✓ I think a boy who takes a mirror with him is so weird.

主语是单数“a boy”，谓语动词应加-s变为“takes”，代词“himself”应改为宾格“him”。

× So sometimes I sometimes I need to check my appearance, check my those, those annoying acne scars.

✓ So sometimes I need to check my appearance and those annoying acne scars.

“my those”搭配错误，应去掉“my”，直接用“those”。

× I would use my phone and take a selfie photos.

✓ I would use my phone and take selfie photos.

“selfie photos”是复数，前面不需要冠词“a”。

× No, I think mirror is mirror is not suitable for decoration.

✓ No, I think a mirror is not suitable for decoration.

缺少冠词“a”，且重复“mirror is”应去掉一个。

× Yeah, in Chinese philosophy, mirror stands.

✓ Yeah, in Chinese philosophy, a mirror stands for something.

缺少冠词“a”，且句子不完整，需补充谓语。

× Mirror stands for some evil things.

✓ A mirror stands for some evil things.

缺少冠词“a”，使句子完整。

× If if you put so many mirrors in your room, it may, it may count on some ghosts.

✓ If you put so many mirrors in your room, it may attract some ghosts.

重复“if”，且“count on some ghosts”表达错误，应改为“attract some ghosts”。