Mirrors— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains grammatical errors. Avoid irrelevant or confusing information like 'I'm an alcoholic person' which does not relate to the question. Try to give a clear and direct response with proper sentence structure and use linking words to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I like looking at myself in the mirror, especially in the morning. I usually check my appearance before going to work to make sure I look presentable.

提案: Your answer has many hesitations and unclear phrases like 'wasted to such a health station'. Try to avoid filler words and be more specific and coherent. Use linking words to connect your ideas and describe the mirror and its effect clearly.

例: Yes, I have bought mirrors before. For example, last month I purchased a wooden frame mirror from a local store, which I hung in my room to enhance its beauty.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains repetitions and filler words. Try to speak more fluently and use linking words to make your answer coherent. Also, avoid repeating words and improve sentence structure.

例: Yes, I usually carry a small wooden frame mirror in my bag. It was a gift from my father on my 10th birthday, and I use it to check my appearance throughout the day.

提案: Your answer is somewhat confusing and contains contradictory statements. Avoid unnecessary fillers and clarify your ideas. Use linking words to connect your thoughts logically and be specific about your plans.

例: Yes, I would like to use mirrors to decorate my room. Currently, my room needs some improvement, so in the future, I plan to buy wooden frame mirrors to enhance its appearance.

× I often look like myself in mirror because I'm a alcoholic person.

✓ I often look at myself in the mirror because I'm an alcoholic person.

The correct preposition to use with 'look' when referring to seeing oneself is 'at'. Also, the definite article 'the' is needed before 'mirror'. Additionally, 'a alcoholic' should be 'an alcoholic' because 'alcoholic' starts with a vowel sound.

× I'm a alcoholic person.

✓ I'm an alcoholic person.

The article 'a' should be 'an' before words starting with a vowel sound like 'alcoholic'.

× Basically I usually go to work on daily basis, so in the early morning I used to check myself in mirror when I get ready.

✓ Basically, I usually go to work on a daily basis, so in the early morning I used to check myself in the mirror when I get ready.

The phrase should be 'on a daily basis' with the article 'a'. Also, 'in the mirror' is the correct prepositional phrase, and a comma is needed after 'Basically' for clarity.

× I have bought a mirrors.

✓ I have bought mirrors.

The article 'a' is incorrect before the plural noun 'mirrors'. It should be omitted.

× I wasted to such a uh, uh, such a health station.

✓ I went to such a health station.

The verb 'wasted' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'went'. Also, 'to' is used with 'went' but not with 'wasted'. The phrase 'such a uh, uh, such a' is redundant and should be simplified.

× At that time I bought such a wooden frame mirror which enhance the beauty of my room as I hang in my room.

✓ At that time, I bought a wooden frame mirror which enhances the beauty of my room as I hang it in my room.

The verb 'enhance' should be in third person singular 'enhances' to agree with 'mirror'. Also, 'a wooden frame mirror' is correct article usage. The phrase 'as I hang in my room' is incomplete; it should be 'as I hang it in my room'.

× I usually take take a mirror in my bag.

✓ I usually take a mirror in my bag.

The repetition of 'take' is a mistake and should be removed.

× Actually I have a small mirror which is uh, wooden frame, uh, mirror that's gifted by my father on my 10th birthday.

✓ Actually, I have a small wooden frame mirror that was gifted to me by my father on my 10th birthday.

The phrase 'wooden frame, uh, mirror' should be 'wooden frame mirror' without commas. Also, 'that's gifted by my father' should be 'that was gifted to me by my father' for correct passive voice and preposition usage.

× From that time usually I have it in my purse.

✓ Since that time, I usually have it in my purse.

The phrase 'From that time' is better expressed as 'Since that time' to indicate a continuing action. Also, a comma after the introductory phrase improves clarity.

× Uh, in this mirror I check myself for how I am looking.

✓ In this mirror, I check how I am looking.

The phrase 'check myself for how I am looking' is awkward. It should be 'check how I am looking'. Also, a comma after 'In this mirror' is appropriate.

× I would use mirror to decorate my room.

✓ I would use a mirror to decorate my room.

The article 'a' is needed before 'mirror'. The modal verb 'would' is correctly used here to express a hypothetical action.

× Nowadays my room need more development, so in the upcoming years I definitely want to use a mirror in order to decorate my rooms.

✓ Nowadays, my room needs more development, so in the upcoming years I definitely want to use mirrors in order to decorate my room.

The verb 'need' should be 'needs' to agree with singular subject 'room'. 'Rooms' should be singular to match 'my room'. Also, a comma after 'Nowadays' improves clarity.

× Actually I wouldn't, then I wouldn't tend it to buy to buy wooden frame mirrors.

✓ Actually, I wouldn't; then I wouldn't tend to buy wooden frame mirrors.

The phrase is unclear and awkward. 'Wouldn't tend it to buy to buy' is incorrect. It should be 'wouldn't tend to buy'. Also, punctuation is added for clarity.