Mirrors— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Reduce hesitations and filler words, correct small grammar mistakes, and make the answer more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (e.g., "usually", "and").

例: Yes, I often look at myself in the mirror — usually twice a day. In the morning I check my appearance before work, and at night I follow a skincare routine to remove makeup and moisturize my skin.

提案: Fix grammar and word choice, avoid repetition, and structure the response with a clear topic sentence followed by specific details and an example. Use linking words like "because" or "for example" correctly.

例: No, I have never bought a mirror; most of mine were gifts from family. For example, my first mirror was a birthday present from my grandfather, which I still keep because it has sentimental value.

提案: Reduce fillers and avoid repeating phrases. Give a concise topic sentence then add specific situations using cohesive phrases such as "for example" and "to check". Use correct prepositions and smoother phrasing.

例: Yes, I usually carry a small mirror in my bag to make sure my appearance is neat. For example, after meals I check for food on my face and I also use it to touch up my makeup or fix my hair.

提案: Improve grammar and sentence structure, remove redundancy, and use linking words to organize details. Begin with a clear statement about using mirrors for decoration, then provide two specific examples and a brief reason why you like them.

例: Yes, I use mirrors as decoration because they make rooms look brighter and larger. For instance, we have two decorative mirrors in the bedroom that we use to check our outfits before work, and another functional mirror in the bathroom for our skincare routine.

× Yes, I like looking at myself at the mirror.

✓ Yes, I like looking at myself in the mirror.

Use 'in' with 'mirror' to indicate reflection; 'at the mirror' is incorrect in this context. Say 'in the mirror' to show you see your reflection. ID:11

× Uh, probably, uh, twice per day, umm, usually in the morning when I'm, uh, getting ready to go work or to go to school, umm, the last time.

✓ Probably twice a day, usually in the morning when I'm getting ready to go to work or to school, and at night when I'm getting ready to sleep.

'Twice per day' is acceptable but 'twice a day' is more natural. Use 'go to work' with 'to' and parallel structure 'go to work or to school.' 'The last time' is unclear and likely meant 'at night.' Maintain present continuous 'I'm getting' for habitual actions near the present. ID:6

× And the night when I'm preparing myself to going to sleep, umm, I'm doing my skin care.

✓ And at night when I'm preparing to go to sleep, I'm doing my skin care.

Use 'at night' for times of day. After 'preparing,' use the infinitive 'to go' not 'to going.' Also 'prepare oneself to do something' often shortened to 'preparing to go to sleep.' ID:11

× That's an interesting question because I have never about my mirrors.

✓ That's an interesting question because I have never bought a mirror.

The original lacks the main verb; 'have never about my mirrors' is ungrammatical. Context shows the intended meaning is 'have never bought a mirror.' Use present perfect 'have never bought' for life experience. ID:26

× Uh, I have mirrors as gifts from my family.

✓ I have mirrors that were gifts from my family.

'Gifts from my family' is acceptable but 'as gifts from my family' is awkward. Use 'that were gifts' or 'given by my family' for clarity. ID:11

× For example, my first mirror was a gift from my grandfather he gave me for my birthday.

✓ For example, my first mirror was a gift from my grandfather; he gave it to me for my birthday.

Run-on sentence; needs separation or conjunction. Also use 'gave it to me' rather than 'gave me' when referring to the object, and include appropriate punctuation or conjunction. ID:26

× And I really keep it like a very good present.

✓ And I really keep it as a very special present.

'Keep it like' is incorrect; use 'keep it as' or 'consider it' and 'very good present' is unnatural—'very special present' or 'a very meaningful gift' is better. ID:12

× And yes, I never bought it.

✓ And yes, I never bought it.

While 'I never bought it' is grammatically past, the speaker has been using present perfect elsewhere. 'I have never bought it' would be more consistent for life experience. However, if referring to a specific past action, 'I never bought it' is acceptable. Recommend: 'I have never bought one.' ID:6

× Yes, I usually take a mirror with me in my bag, uh, just to be sure that everything is OK.

✓ Yes, I usually carry a mirror in my bag just to make sure that everything is okay.

'Take a mirror with me in my bag' is understandable but 'carry a mirror in my bag' is more natural. 'Make sure' is preferred to 'be sure' in this context; 'okay' more standard than 'OK.' No third person singular error present but phrasing improved. ID:2

× I like to use the mirror after, for example, after dinner, if I check if I have uh, something in my face, umm, and for you know, check my makeup or just check my hair.

✓ I like to use the mirror, for example after dinner, to check if I have something on my face, or to check my makeup or my hair.

Remove redundant 'after' and use 'on my face' rather than 'in my face.' 'For you know' is filler and should be removed. Use infinitive 'to check' for purpose. Clean parallel structure. ID:11

× Yes, I like mirror to decorate rooms.

✓ Yes, I like mirrors to decorate rooms.

'Mirror' is countable; use plural 'mirrors' or 'a mirror.' Also 'to decorate rooms' is acceptable; use plural for general statement. ID:22

× For example, in my bedroom I have two mirrors there and me and my husband like to have mirrors and look ourselves, uh, before going to work.

✓ For example, in my bedroom I have two mirrors, and my husband and I like to look at ourselves before going to work.

Remove redundant 'there.' Use subject order 'my husband and I.' Use 'look at ourselves' (need 'at'). 'Like to have mirrors and look ourselves' is ungrammatical; combine appropriately. ID:12

× Umm Additionally, we have another mirror in the bathroom for our skin care routine time and we really like the mirrors and very good designed.

✓ Additionally, we have another mirror in the bathroom for our skin care routine, and we really like the mirrors; they are very well designed.

Fix conjunctions and sentence flow. 'Skin care routine time' is awkward—use 'for our skin care routine.' 'Very good designed' is incorrect word order and form; use 'very well designed' or 'well-designed.' Add punctuation for clarity. ID:16