Mirrors— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn ý tưởng rõ nhưng có lỗi ngữ pháp, từ vựng lặp lại và thiếu liên kết mạch lạc. Cần: 1) Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn gọn; 2) Sửa thì và đại từ (I prefer to look…; my appearance…); 3) Dùng liên từ để nối ý (for example, because, so); 4) Giảm độ dài, tối đa 4–5 câu. Hãy cụ thể hơn về tần suất và lý do (ví dụ: mỗi sáng trước khi ra khỏi nhà để tự tin).

例: Yes, I do. I look at myself in the mirror every morning before leaving the house because it helps me feel confident. For example, I check my hair and make sure my outfit looks tidy. This small routine makes me feel more prepared for the day.

提案: Câu trả lời thiếu rõ ràng và có mâu thuẫn (bảo là mua rồi nhưng nói borrowed). Nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, dùng từ không phù hợp (fit by my hands), phát âm lặp (umm). Cần: 1) Trả lời trực tiếp; 2) Sử dụng thì đúng (I bought / I borrow); 3) Giải thích ngắn gọn và cụ thể (kích thước, lý do mang theo); 4) Tránh từ không trang trọng như "ugly" hoặc "umm".

例: Yes, I have. I usually buy a small handheld mirror that fits in my pocket because it is convenient. I carry it when I go out so I can quickly check my makeup or hair and fix anything if needed.

提案: Bạn trả lời rõ ý nhưng có lỗi ngữ pháp (some mirror, make up as verb/noun). Câu hơi vòng và có từ không tự nhiên (go to choice). Cần: 1) Dùng cấu trúc ngắn gọn, đúng (I usually carry a mirror); 2) Nêu tần suất cụ thể (usually, often); 3) Thêm liên từ để nối ý; 4) Nêu hoàn cảnh cụ thể (commuting by bicycle).

例: Yes, I usually carry a small mirror with me. I often check my makeup and hair while commuting by bicycle, so having a mirror is very helpful. It lets me quickly fix anything before I meet friends or go to class.

提案: Ý tưởng tốt và trực tiếp nhưng có lỗi từ vựng (check my experience → check my appearance) và thì (had → has). Cần: 1) Sửa lỗi từ vựng và thì; 2) Giải thích ngắn gọn về lý do văn hóa/quan niệm; 3) Thêm liên từ để làm câu mạch lạc; 4) Giữ câu ngắn gọn và rõ ràng.

例: No, I wouldn't. I don't put mirrors in my bedroom because my mother believes it is unlucky. Instead, I have a small mirror in the bathroom which I use to check my appearance before going out.

× I prefer look at myself in the mirror every day.

✓ I prefer to look at myself in the mirror every day.

Use the infinitive 'to look' after the verb 'prefer' when stating a habitual action. The correct structure is 'prefer to + verb'.

× This is because I think appearance is good.

✓ This is because I think my appearance is good.

The noun 'appearance' needs a determiner or possessive pronoun to show whose appearance is meant. Use 'my' to indicate the speaker's appearance.

× Appearance is a great way to express their respect whenever we whenever I going out such as go to school or hanging out with my friends.

✓ Appearance is a great way to show respect when I go out, such as going to school or hanging out with my friends.

Multiple errors: incorrect pronoun 'their' should be 'show' not 'express their respect' in this context; repetition 'whenever we whenever I' and wrong verb form 'going' after 'I'. Rephrase to 'show respect' and use 'go' for simple present habitual action and 'going' for gerund after 'such as'.

× Absolutely yes I borrowed a mirror.

✓ Absolutely yes, I bought a mirror.

Context asks 'Have you ever bought mirrors?' so use 'bought' (present perfect or past) related verb; the original 'borrowed' changes meaning. Also add a comma after interjection.

× Whenever I go outside I just I buy a small mirror just fit by my hands and bring it every days and sometimes if I have the free times I will check my appearance how it look like to umm fix it if they ugly.

✓ Whenever I go out I buy a small handheld mirror and bring it every day. Sometimes if I have free time I check my appearance to see how it looks and fix it if it looks ugly.

Multiple issues corrected: 'go outside' -> 'go out' more natural; 'just fit by my hands' -> 'handheld' or 'fits in my hand'; 'every days' -> 'every day' (singular after 'every'); 'free times' -> 'free time' uncountable; verb form 'how it look like' -> 'how it looks' (subject-verb agreement); 'they ugly' -> 'it looks ugly' (correct pronoun 'it' for appearance).

× I always take some mirror with me whenever I have a chance.

✓ I always take a mirror with me whenever I have the chance.

Use singular 'a mirror' rather than 'some mirror'. 'Have a chance' should be 'have the chance' for a specific opportunity in these contexts.

× This is because when I go outside I often make up and I think mirror is a good go to choice for me to check my makeup and my hair when I use my bicycle.

✓ This is because when I go out I often put on makeup, and I think a mirror is a good go-to choice for me to check my makeup and hair when I use my bicycle.

Use 'put on makeup' rather than 'make up' as a verb phrase; add article 'a mirror'; 'go to' should be hyphenated as 'go-to' when used as an adjective; remove redundant 'my' before hair; sentence punctuation improved.

× No, I don't put mirrors in my bedroom.

✓ No, I don't put a mirror in my bedroom.

Context indicates a single mirror in the bedroom, so use 'a mirror'. If intended plural, original could be 'mirrors', but following the student's later comment about 'a small mirror', singular is appropriate.

× I live alone and my mother believes that having a mirror in the room is unlucky.

✓ I live alone, and my mother believes that having a mirror in the room is unlucky.

Add a comma for readability. Pronouns are correct here; main issue was punctuation. Included as minor correction for clarity.

× That's why my bathroom had a small mirror which helped me check my experience whenever I go outside.

✓ That's why my bathroom has a small mirror that helps me check my appearance whenever I go out.

Tense: use present 'has' to match habitual action 'whenever I go out'; 'experience' is incorrect word choice; use 'appearance'; 'which helped me' -> 'that helps me' for present habit; 'go outside' -> 'go out' for natural phrasing.