Dreams— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ должен быть более ясным и структурированным. Следует использовать связующие слова и избегать грамматических ошибок, чтобы сделать ответ более естественным и понятным.

例: Yes, I can remember my dreams clearly. For example, I often dream about my childhood, especially the times when I was alone, which feels similar to my current situation.

提案: Ответ должен быть более связным и грамматически правильным. Используйте связующие слова для плавного перехода между идеями и уточните, с кем именно вы делитесь мечтами.

例: Yes, I usually share my dreams with others. For instance, I often talk about my dreams with my new friends, and currently, I share them with one of my girlfriends.

提案: Ответ неясен и содержит грамматические ошибки. Следует переформулировать ответ, чтобы он был логичным и содержал конкретные объяснения.

例: Yes, I believe dreams have special meanings because they can inspire people to achieve big goals. Moreover, dreams can help us to forgive and forget past troubles.

提案: Ответ должен быть более грамматически правильным и связным. Используйте связующие слова и уточните, как достижение мечты повлияет на вас и вашу семью.

例: Yes, I really want to make my dreams come true. One of my dreams is to become a pilot. When I achieve this goal, my family will be happy for me, and I will feel very happy as well.

× Yeah, I had my dreams of when I was a kid and now I stay alone like was then.

✓ Yeah, I had dreams when I was a kid and now I stay alone like I was then.

The phrase 'I had my dreams of when I was a kid' is awkward and incorrect. 'Had my dreams of' should be simplified to 'had dreams when'. Also, 'like was then' is missing the subject 'I'. The correct form is 'like I was then'. This corrects the past tense usage and sentence clarity.

× I always share my dreams with my new friends and for example currently I share my dreams with my one of girlfriend.

✓ I always share my dreams with my new friends and, for example, currently I share my dreams with one of my girlfriends.

The phrase 'my one of girlfriend' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'one of my girlfriends'. Also, commas are needed around 'for example' to improve sentence clarity.

× Yeah, I do that dream is always have a special meaning because the dream gets the help from each other people to get a big goal and.

✓ Yeah, I think that dreams always have a special meaning because they help each other to achieve big goals.

The original sentence has incorrect pronoun usage and awkward structure. 'I do that dream is always have' is incorrect; it should be 'I think that dreams always have'. 'The dream gets the help from each other people' is unclear; it should be 'they help each other'. Also, 'to get a big goal' is better expressed as 'to achieve big goals'.

× To become out, forgive, forget these dreams.

✓ They help us to overcome, forgive, and forget through these dreams.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks a clear subject and verb. Adding 'They help us to' clarifies the meaning and corrects the sentence structure.

× When I will reach this gold stream, my family also to be happy, happy with me and also I will so much happy.

✓ When I reach this goal, my family will also be happy with me, and I will be very happy too.

In English, the future tense in 'when' clauses uses the present tense, not 'will'. So 'When I will reach' should be 'When I reach'. Also, 'my family also to be happy' is incorrect; it should be 'my family will also be happy'. 'I will so much happy' is incorrect; it should be 'I will be very happy'.