Dreams— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors, which affects naturalness and effectiveness. Try to express your ideas clearly and avoid confusing phrases. Also, keep your answer concise and directly related to the question.

例: Yes, I can remember my dreams clearly. For example, I often dream about traveling around the world and exploring the sea as freely as possible.

提案: Your answer is relevant but has some grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and correct sentence structures to improve clarity.

例: Yes, I sometimes share my dreams with my friends and family. Moreover, I am always interested in other people's dreams to see if I can help them achieve their goals.

提案: Your answer is meaningful but repetitive and lacks linking words. Try to use varied vocabulary and connect your ideas logically to make your response more coherent.

例: Yes, I believe dreams have special meanings. If you have a dream and work hard to achieve it, there are no limits to what you can accomplish.

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains grammatical errors and filler words. Avoid using fillers and focus on clear, concise sentences with proper grammar.

例: Yes, definitely. The main purpose of having a dream is to make it come true, and I do everything possible to achieve it.

× I always wanted to travel around the world and the sea is much cut free as I can.

✓ I have always wanted to travel around the world and the sea is as clear as I can imagine.

The phrase 'much cut free' is incorrect and unclear. The correct expression is 'as clear as I can imagine' to describe the sea's clarity. Also, 'I always wanted' should be 'I have always wanted' to indicate a continuing desire.

× I'm always interested what other people dream is and if there is something I can help them.

✓ I'm always interested in what other people dream and if there is something I can do to help them.

The phrase 'interested what other people dream is' is incorrect; it should be 'interested in what other people dream'. Also, 'if there is something I can help them' lacks the verb 'do' and should be 'if there is something I can do to help them'.

× If you do everything to come your dreams true and if you work hard enough, the sky is the limit.

✓ If you do everything to make your dreams come true and if you work hard enough, the sky is the limit.

The phrase 'come your dreams true' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'make your dreams come true'. The verb 'make' is necessary here to express causing dreams to become reality.

× main idea to have a dream is to come they through and I do everything umm to implement or to complete this dream.

✓ The main idea of having a dream is to make it come true and I do everything to implement or complete this dream.

The phrase 'come they through' is incorrect; it should be 'make it come true' referring to the dream. Also, 'main idea to have a dream' should be 'The main idea of having a dream' for correct noun phrase structure.