Dreams— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，建议注意时态一致性和句子结构的清晰，避免冗长句子。可以尝试用更简洁的句子表达梦想内容。

例: Yes, I remember my dreams clearly. I dream of having enough money to buy what I like and to travel to many countries. This way, I can broaden my horizons and make new friends.

提案: 回答不完整且语法错误较多，建议完整表达想法，注意时态和句子完整性，避免句子中断。

例: Yes, I often share my dreams with my parents. For example, when I was nine, I dreamed of becoming a teacher. They gave me useful advice and encouraged me to pursue my goals.

提案: 回答不连贯且句子未完成，建议使用连贯的句子表达观点，增加具体细节，避免语法错误。

例: Yes, I believe dreams have special meanings. They motivate me to improve myself and have a positive impact on my daily life.

提案: 回答表达了观点，但句子结构和用词不够自然，建议使用更地道的表达方式，注意语法和词汇搭配。

例: Yes, absolutely. Making my dreams come true makes me very happy and satisfied because it helps me become a better person and enjoy a wonderful life.

× I remembered that I dream to be a people who have enough money and I can buy everything that I like and I can travel to the every country which I can broaden my horizons and make new friends.

✓ I remember that I dreamed to be a person who has enough money and can buy everything that I like and can travel to every country to broaden my horizons and make new friends.

这里的时态应该用一般现在时或过去时来表达记忆的内容，'remembered'改为'remember'更符合语境；'dream'应使用过去式'dreamed'；'people'是复数，应该用单数'person'；'have'改为'has'以符合单数主语；'the every country'中'the'多余，应去掉。

× I remembered that I dream to be a people who have enough money and I can buy everything that I like and I can travel to the every country which I can broaden my horizons and make new friends.

✓ I remember that I dreamed to be a person who has enough money and can buy everything that I like and can travel to every country to broaden my horizons and make new friends.

'people'是复数，表示人们，句中应使用单数'person'表示一个人。

× I remembered that I dream to be a people who have enough money and I can buy everything that I like and I can travel to the every country which I can broaden my horizons and make new friends.

✓ I remember that I dreamed to be a person who has enough money and can buy everything that I like and can travel to every country to broaden my horizons and make new friends.

主语是单数'person'，谓语动词应使用第三人称单数形式'have'改为'has'。

× I remembered that I dream to be a people who have enough money and I can buy everything that I like and I can travel to the every country which I can broaden my horizons and make new friends.

✓ I remember that I dreamed to be a person who has enough money and can buy everything that I like and can travel to every country to broaden my horizons and make new friends.

'travel to the every country'中'the'不应与'every'连用，应去掉'the'。

× I remember that I shared my dreams with my parents and they gave me some suggestions for my dreams.

✓ I remember that I shared my dreams with my parents and they gave me some suggestions for my dreams.

此句时态正确，无需修改。

× For example, I dreamed to be a teacher about nine years old.

✓ For example, I dreamed of being a teacher when I was about nine years old.

'dreamed to be'应改为'dreamed of being'；'about nine years old'前应加'when I was'表示年龄。

× Then they gave me some useful suggestions and encouraged me to.

✓ Then they gave me some useful suggestions and encouraged me.

句子末尾'infinitive to'不完整，应去掉'to'。

× dreams play a closer role in our daily life, even play a positive effect on our living because they give me some, they motivate me to be a better person in the future and.

✓ Dreams play a closer role in our daily life and even have a positive effect on our lives because they motivate me to be a better person in the future.

'closer role'应为'closer'不合适，建议改为'important role'或直接去掉；'play a positive effect'应改为'have a positive effect'；'living'改为'life'；句子末尾不完整，应删去多余部分。

× dreams play a closer role in our daily life, even play a positive effect on our living because they give me some, they motivate me to be a better person in the future and.

✓ Dreams play an important role in our daily life and even have a positive effect on our lives because they motivate me to be a better person in the future.

句中'give me some'不完整且不合适，应删除；'they'指代不清，改为连词连接句子更通顺。

× I particularly enjoy making my dream come true because it really makes me happy and I will feel very satisfied with myself because I become a better person and I pursue the wonderful of the life.

✓ I particularly enjoy making my dream come true because it really makes me happy and I feel very satisfied with myself because I become a better person and I pursue the wonderful life.

'will feel'改为一般现在时'feel'以保持时态一致；'the wonderful of the life'结构错误，应改为'wonderful life'。