Dreams— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: In English (Cambodia), try to make your answer more natural and clear by avoiding repetition and improving sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and be more specific about your dream.

例: When I was a child, I dreamed of studying abroad because it would give me a great opportunity to experience a new lifestyle. If I could study outside my country, I would have the chance to learn different cultures and improve my education.

提案: In English (Cambodia), focus on clarity and grammar. Avoid contradictions and use correct verb forms. Use linking words to explain reasons clearly and be specific about how sharing dreams helps you.

例: Yes, I often share my dreams with my close friends and family because it helps me feel motivated and supported. When I talk with them, I feel calm and comfortable since they usually give me useful advice to overcome problems.

提案: In English (Cambodia), improve sentence structure and grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. Be more specific and clear about what special meanings dreams have.

例: Yes, I believe dreams have special meanings because achieving your goals makes you feel proud and happy. Moreover, dreams give you many opportunities to try new things, experience different lifestyles, and explore the world.

提案: In English (Cambodia), try to express your ideas more clearly and avoid repeating phrases. Use linking words to explain reasons logically and be specific about how achieving your dreams helps you.

例: Yes, I definitely want to make my dreams come true because achieving my plans will give me many opportunities. For example, it will be easier for me to overcome problems and try difficult things confidently.

× I would say when I was a child, I used to have a dream that was about studying abroad because I think studying abroad is a great opportunity for me to experience new lifestyle.

✓ I would say when I was a child, I used to have a dream about studying abroad because I think studying abroad is a great opportunity for me to experience a new lifestyle.

The phrase 'a dream that was about studying abroad' is wordy and awkward. Using 'a dream about studying abroad' is more natural and grammatically correct. Also, 'new lifestyle' needs an article 'a' because 'lifestyle' is a singular countable noun.

× I would say if I can study outside of my country, I will get chance to study.

✓ I would say if I could study outside of my country, I would get a chance to study.

The sentence expresses a hypothetical situation, so the modal verbs should be in the conditional form: 'could' and 'would'. Also, 'get chance' needs the article 'a' before 'chance'.

× Yes, I don't share my dream with my close friend and family quite often because it's helped me to feel motivated and stay connected.

✓ Yes, I don't share my dream with my close friends and family quite often because it helps me to feel motivated and stay connected.

'Friend' should be plural 'friends' to match 'family' which is plural. Also, 'it's helped me' is incorrect tense; present simple 'it helps me' fits better here because the action is habitual.

× Talking sharing with them would allow me to feel calm and comfortable because they usually provide me some advice to achieve the problem to.

✓ Talking and sharing with them allows me to feel calm and comfortable because they usually provide me with some advice to solve the problem.

'Talking sharing' needs a conjunction 'and' to connect the two gerunds. 'Provide me some advice' requires the preposition 'with'. 'Achieve the problem' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'solve the problem'.

× Yes, for my opinion to have special meaning because when you achieve your goal you will be so proud and feel pleasure about what you have done.

✓ Yes, in my opinion, dreams have special meaning because when you achieve your goal, you will be very proud and feel pleasure about what you have done.

The phrase 'for my opinion' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'in my opinion'. Also, the sentence was missing a subject for 'have special meaning', so 'dreams' is added for clarity.

× Also I would say you have so many opportunity to do something new like to experience new lifestyle, to explore the world or whenever you want to achieve the problem.

✓ Also, I would say you have so many opportunities to do something new like experience a new lifestyle, explore the world, or whenever you want to solve a problem.

'Opportunity' should be plural 'opportunities' to match 'so many'. 'Experience new lifestyle' needs an article 'a' before 'new lifestyle'. 'Achieve the problem' is incorrect; 'solve a problem' is correct.

× Yes, I definitely want to make my dream come true because when I have achieved my plan in the future, I would say I would have so many opportunity to do like I would say if I want to overcome a problem or try to do something difficult, it's easy for me to deal with it so.

✓ Yes, I definitely want to make my dream come true because when I achieve my plan in the future, I will have so many opportunities to do things. For example, if I want to overcome a problem or try to do something difficult, it will be easy for me to deal with it.

The phrase 'when I have achieved my plan in the future' mixes tenses; simple present 'achieve' is better for future plans. 'Would say I would have' is redundant; use 'I will have'. 'Opportunity' should be plural 'opportunities'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity and correctness.