Dreams— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is natural and provides interesting details, but it could be more concise and avoid minor redundancy. Try to limit your response to 4-5 sentences and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I usually have trouble remembering my dreams. However, since I began taking magnesium supplements, I've experienced vivid lucid dreams, although sometimes they are hard to understand after waking up.

提案: Your answer addresses the question directly but contains some redundancy and minor grammatical errors. Try to use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid repeating similar phrases.

例: I usually don't share my dreams because they can be very personal. Moreover, I'm not interested in hearing about other people's dreams either.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be clearer and more coherent. Avoid repetition and use linking words to connect your ideas. Also, provide a more specific example to support your opinion.

例: I believe dreams often reveal a person's inner fears and desires. For instance, if someone is determined to succeed, they might frequently dream about achieving their goals.

提案: Your answer is clear but contains some repetition and could be more concise. Use linking words to improve flow and avoid repeating words unnecessarily.

例: Yes, I want to make some of my dreams come true, especially those related to success and happiness. However, I don't wish for nightmares to become reality.

× ever since I started taking magnesium supplements I started getting these vivid lucid dreams which are sometimes incomprehensible after I wake up.

✓ ever since I started taking magnesium supplements I have started getting these vivid lucid dreams which are sometimes incomprehensible after I wake up.

The phrase 'ever since' indicates an action that began in the past and continues to the present, so the present perfect tense 'have started' is appropriate instead of the simple past 'started'. This ensures correct tense usage to express ongoing effects.

× I don't feel com comfortable sharing those sort of things with others and nor am I interested in learning other people's dreams as well.

✓ I don't feel comfortable sharing those sorts of things with others, nor am I interested in learning other people's dreams as well.

The word 'com' is a typographical error and should be removed. Also, 'those sort of things' should be 'those sorts of things' to agree in number. The conjunction 'and nor' is incorrect; 'nor' alone is sufficient to connect the negative clauses.

× If I I am someone who really wants to achieve something in life, I'm more likely to see dreams related to that.

✓ If I am someone who really wants to achieve something in life, I'm more likely to see dreams related to that.

The repetition of 'I' is a typographical error and disrupts sentence structure. Removing the extra 'I' corrects the sentence and improves clarity.

× So if dreams are related to my success and happiness, I'll I'll more than likely want them to be real.

✓ So if dreams are related to my success and happiness, I'll more than likely want them to be real.

The repetition of 'I'll' is a typographical error. Removing the duplicate corrects the sentence and maintains proper pronoun usage.