Dreams— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了清晰的主题，但句子结构和时态使用不够准确，且缺少连接词使得内容显得有些断裂。建议注意时态一致性，使用连接词如“however”或“but”来使句子更连贯，同时避免重复表达。

例: When I was young, I was crazy about art and wanted to be a costume designer or an artist. However, as I grew older, I gradually developed a deep interest in physics. Therefore, now I want to become a physics teacher.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和用词不当，如“streaming”应为“dreams”，且句子较长且缺少适当的停顿和连接词。建议简化句子结构，使用正确词汇，并通过连接词如“because”或“thus”使表达更流畅。

例: Yes, I often share my dreams with others because it helps us learn about each other's aspirations. Sometimes, we find people who share the same dreams, so we can support each other to achieve them.

提案: 回答内容较好，但“treatment about falling”表达不准确，建议使用更自然的表达如“dreams about falling”。同时，可以增加连接词使句子更连贯。

例: Yes, I think dreams can have special meanings because they often reflect our subconscious thoughts or unresolved issues. For example, dreams about falling might indicate feelings of insecurity or stress in real life.

提案: 回答不够连贯，句子结构不完整且表达不清晰。建议使用完整句子，明确表达观点，并使用连接词如“because”或“so”来增强逻辑性。

例: I want to make my dreams come true because, in some dreams, I can achieve things that are impossible for me in real life due to various limitations.

× I want to be a costume designer or an artist then.

✓ I wanted to be a costume designer or an artist then.

这里描述的是过去的愿望，应该使用过去时态，'want' 应改为 'wanted'。

× But as I get older, I find my deep interest in physics gradually.

✓ But as I got older, I found my deep interest in physics gradually.

这里描述的是过去随着年龄增长的变化，应该使用过去时态，'get' 和 'find' 应改为 'got' 和 'found'。

× we all do have an interest in others dreams because through this kind of communication we can learn about other streaming and we may find someone who have a shared dream.

✓ we all do have an interest in others' dreams because through this kind of communication we can learn about other people's dreams and we may find someone who has a shared dream.

'others dreams' 应为 'others' dreams'，表示他人的梦想，需加所有格；'other streaming' 语义不明，推测为 'other people's dreams'；'someone who have' 主谓不一致，'have' 应改为 'has'。

× someone who have a shared dream.

✓ someone who has a shared dream.

'someone' 是第三人称单数，谓语动词应使用第三人称单数形式 'has'，而不是 'have'。

× treatment about falling might indicate the feelings of insecurity or stress in real life.

✓ dreams about falling might indicate the feelings of insecurity or stress in real life.

'treatment about falling' 语义不通，应该是 'dreams about falling'，表示关于坠落的梦。

× Since in some dreams I can finish something that I can't do in real life due to diverse limits.

✓ Since in some dreams I can finish something that I can't do in real life due to various limits.

'diverse limits' 用词不当，应该用 'various limits' 表示各种限制。