Dreams— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần tự nhiên hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên sử dụng thì quá khứ đơn cho hành động đã xảy ra và thêm liên từ để câu mạch lạc hơn. Ví dụ, bạn có thể nói rõ hơn về cảm xúc và chi tiết về giấc mơ.

例: Yes, I remember my dreams clearly. When I was about 15 years old, I dreamed of becoming a singer, which was really fascinating and amazing to me.

提案: Bạn nên sử dụng cấu trúc câu rõ ràng và tránh dùng từ không chính xác như 'secretly' trong ngữ cảnh này. Hãy giải thích lý do một cách cụ thể và dùng liên từ để câu trôi chảy hơn.

例: No, I don't share my dreams with others because I prefer to keep them private and work on them patiently. This way, I can focus better and achieve my goals more effectively.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý đến số nhiều của danh từ 'meanings' và tránh lặp từ 'help' nhiều lần. Hãy dùng từ vựng phong phú hơn và câu có cấu trúc rõ ràng hơn.

例: For me, I believe that dreams have special meanings because they help us stay focused and patiently work towards our goals.

提案: Câu trả lời có ý tưởng tốt nhưng cần tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và từ không phù hợp như 'Go go ahead'. Hãy dùng câu hoàn chỉnh và liên kết ý rõ ràng hơn.

例: Yes, I really want to make my dreams come true because it keeps me motivated and positive about my future. For example, when I work towards my goals, I feel more confident and excited to move forward.

× Yes, I remembered that.

✓ Yes, I remember that.

The question is in the present tense asking about current memory, so the answer should also be in the present tense 'remember' instead of past tense 'remembered'.

× The dreams that I had is I was a singer when I was about 15 years old, which really fascinating and amazing.

✓ The dream that I had is that I was a singer when I was about 15 years old, which was really fascinating and amazing.

'Dreams' is plural but the sentence refers to a single dream, so it should be 'dream'. Also, 'is' should agree with singular 'dream'. The phrase 'which really fascinating and amazing' lacks a verb and should be 'which was really fascinating and amazing' to be grammatically correct.

× No, I don't share my dreams with others because I want to keep it secretly and patiently come up with.

✓ No, I don't share my dreams with others because I want to keep them secret and patiently come up with them.

'Keep it secretly' is incorrect; 'keep them secret' is the correct phrase. Also, 'come up with' requires an object, so 'come up with them' is needed to refer to the dreams.

× So that I can achieve my goals effectively.

✓ So that I can achieve my goals effectively.

This sentence is a fragment and lacks a subject and verb to stand alone. It should be connected to the previous sentence or rephrased to be complete.

× For me, I believe that dreams have very special meaning because it's really helpful and important to help us stay focused and patiently achieve our goals.

✓ For me, I believe that dreams have very special meanings because they are really helpful and important to help us stay focused and patiently achieve our goals.

'Dreams' is plural, so 'meaning' should be plural 'meanings'. Also, 'it's' (it is) should be 'they are' to agree with plural 'dreams'.

× Yes, I really want to make my dreams come true because it helps me stay motivated and positive about my future.

✓ Yes, I really want to make my dreams come true because it helps me stay motivated and positive about my future.

This sentence is grammatically correct and needs no correction.

× For example, when I work towards my goals, I feel more confident and excited about what Go go ahead.

✓ For example, when I work towards my goals, I feel more confident and excited to go ahead.

The phrase 'about what Go go ahead' is incorrect and unclear. It should be 'excited to go ahead' to express enthusiasm about moving forward.