Dreams— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够连贯，句子结构混乱，表达不自然。建议注意句子完整性，避免语法错误，并使用连接词使回答更流畅。

例: Yes, I can remember my childhood dreams clearly. At that time, I wanted to be an astronaut because I thought it was very cool. However, when I entered middle school, my dream changed to becoming a company manager because this job can provide a good income.

提案: 表达不够准确，语法和词汇使用有误。建议使用更准确的表达方式，并注意句子结构和连接词的使用。

例: Yes, I am very curious about other people's dreams because I believe dreams can reveal a person's character. For example, if someone's dream is to be an adventurer, it usually means they are outgoing and love adventure.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和拼写错误，表达不够清晰。建议注意语法正确性，使用恰当的词汇，并使句子更连贯。

例: Yes, I think dreams are a good way to reflect people's personalities. For instance, if someone dreams of being an adventurer, it shows they are brave and outgoing. Moreover, sharing dreams can help strengthen friendships.

提案: 回答中有严重语法和词汇错误，表达不清晰。建议学习正确的句子结构和词汇搭配，确保表达完整且自然。

例: Yes, I definitely want to make my dreams come true, not only because I want a better quality of life and more opportunities, but also because I want to make my parents proud of me.

× Yes, I can remember my dream, my childhood.

✓ Yes, I can remember my dreams from my childhood.

dream 应该用复数形式 dreams，因为这里指的是多个梦。

× At that time.

✓ At that time,

句子不完整，缺少后续内容，应该与后面的句子合并。

× But why into the middle school?

✓ But when I was in middle school,

句子结构不完整且表达不清，应该改为完整的时间状语从句。

× I want to be a manager in a company because this work can give me a lot of money.

✓ I want to be a manager in a company because this job can give me a lot of money.

work 在这里指工作内容，通常用 job 表示具体职位。

× Yes, I'm very curious about people's dreams because I think no people's dream can learn people's character better.

✓ Yes, I'm very curious about people's dreams because I think no one's dream can reveal a person's character better.

no people's dream 用法错误，应该用 no one's dream；learn people's character 语义不通，改为 reveal a person's character。

× Such as if the people's dream is a adventure, I think the character of the people always outgoing and love to adventure.

✓ For example, if a person's dream is an adventure, I think that person is always outgoing and loves adventure.

a adventure 应为 an adventure；character of the people 改为 that person；love to adventure 改为 loves adventure。

× Yes, I think the dreams is a good way of reflecting peoples personality.

✓ Yes, I think dreams are a good way of reflecting people's personality.

dreams 是复数，谓语动词应为 are；peoples 应为 people's。

× If people want to be an adventurer I think their character always outgun.

✓ If people want to be adventurers, I think their character is always outgoing.

adventurer 应用复数 adventurers；outgun 是拼写错误，应为 outgoing。

× Plus sharing dreams can strengthen the relationship between the friends.

✓ Plus, sharing dreams can strengthen the relationships between friends.

the friends 不需要定冠词，且 relationship 应用复数形式 relationships。

× Yes, I definitely want my drain control, not only because I want to a better life quality and better resources, but also I want to my parents proud for me.

✓ Yes, I definitely want to control my dreams, not only because I want a better quality of life and better resources, but also because I want my parents to be proud of me.

drain control 拼写错误，应为 dream control；want to a better life quality 结构错误，应为 want a better quality of life；want to my parents proud for me 语法错误，应为 want my parents to be proud of me。