Dreams— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to reduce hesitation and filler words such as 'uh' and 'umm' to make your answer sound more natural and fluent. Also, use clearer sentence structures and avoid redundancy by combining ideas more effectively.

例: Yes, I can sometimes remember my dreams after waking up, but often the images are quite vague and hard to recall precisely.

提案: Focus on answering directly and clearly. Avoid filler words and unclear phrases like 'meaning in three months'. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically and provide specific reasons.

例: No, I usually don't share my dreams because they are quite ordinary and difficult to explain clearly. However, I believe dreams can have special meanings.

提案: Reduce hesitation and improve vocabulary accuracy, for example, use 'hidden meanings' instead of 'hidden meaning'. Also, mention the philosophers' names correctly and provide a brief explanation to enrich your answer.

例: Yes, I believe dreams have hidden meanings. Philosophers like Jung and Freud have written extensively about interpreting dreams.

提案: Complete your sentences fully and avoid abrupt endings. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific details about your dreams and hopes for your family.

例: Yes, I want to make my dreams come true, but I realise it can be challenging. After starting a family, I hope to support my son in achieving his dreams as well.

× And uh, image of umm, dream is obscure.

✓ And uh, the image of the dream is obscure.

The noun 'image' is singular and requires a definite article 'the' to specify which image is being referred to. Also, 'dream' should be singular here to match 'image'. Adding 'the' clarifies the sentence and makes it grammatically correct.

× No, I don't usually share my dream because the story is very, uh, in common with others and uh, it's a difficult to uh, explain about the dream precisely.

✓ No, I don't usually share my dreams because the stories are very, uh, common with others and uh, it's difficult to explain the dream precisely.

The noun 'dream' should be plural 'dreams' to indicate multiple dreams. Similarly, 'story' should be plural 'stories' to match. The phrase 'it's a difficult to explain about the dream' is incorrect; 'a' should be removed and 'about' is unnecessary. The correct phrase is 'it's difficult to explain the dream precisely.'

× Uh, but I think there are meaning, uh, in three months.

✓ Uh, but I think there is meaning, uh, in three months.

The noun 'meaning' is uncountable and singular, so 'there are' should be 'there is' to agree with the singular noun. Also, the phrase 'in three months' is unclear but kept as is since it may refer to a time frame.

× Yes, I think, umm, there are uh, hidden meaning, uh, in dream and uh, some philosophers such as, uh, Young or Floyd, uh, claimed a lot about uh, umm, mean about that.

✓ Yes, I think, umm, there is uh, hidden meaning, uh, in dreams and uh, some philosophers such as, uh, Jung or Freud, uh, claimed a lot about, uh, umm, meaning that.

'Meaning' is uncountable and singular, so 'there are' should be 'there is'. 'Dream' should be plural 'dreams' to generalise. Also, the names 'Young' and 'Floyd' seem to be misspelled; likely intended 'Jung' and 'Freud'. The phrase 'mean about that' is incorrect; 'meaning that' is appropriate.

× Yes, I want to make my dream come true, but as I grow older I come to understand that it's not easy for many people to achieve it.

✓ Yes, I want to make my dream come true, but as I grow older I have come to understand that it's not easy for many people to achieve it.

The phrase 'I come to understand' refers to a process completed in the past up to now, so present perfect 'have come' is more appropriate to indicate this ongoing understanding.

× But after I make a family I want my son to.

✓ But after I start a family, I want my son to, too.

The phrase 'make a family' is unnatural; 'start a family' is the correct expression. Also, the sentence is incomplete; 'I want my son to' what? Adding 'too' clarifies the meaning that the son is also desired to achieve dreams. A comma after the introductory phrase improves clarity.