Dreams— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and organize your response: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid redundancy (e.g., repeating 'I remember'). Use linking words to connect ideas and correct small grammar issues (e.g., 'have an effect' rather than 'have certain effect').

例: Yes. I often remember my dreams, both pleasant ones and nightmares. For example, I frequently have vivid childhood dreams that feel meaningful, so I tend to reflect on them because I’m a little superstitious and believe they can hint at future events.

提案: Give a clear direct answer first, then one specific reason and an example. Improve grammar and word choice (e.g., 'share my dreams with others', 'interested in others' dreams'). Limit to two or three sentences and use linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

例: Yes, I do share them, but mostly with my parents rather than friends because I find dreams quite personal. For instance, when I have a strange dream I usually tell my mother and we discuss what it might mean.

提案: Structure your reply: give a direct opinion, then one clear reason and a brief example. Correct grammar (e.g., 'I am superstitious; dreams do carry special meanings' and 'losing a tooth' and 'it might mean'). Avoid vague qualifiers and keep it to two or three sentences.

例: Yes, I believe some dreams have meanings because cultural symbols can reflect our emotions. For example, in my culture dreaming about losing a tooth is often thought to signal the loss of a relative, although I don't take these signs too literally.

提案: Answer directly, then give one or two clear reasons and a brief supporting detail. Improve grammar and phrasing (e.g., 'I want my positive dreams to come true' and 'I believe in the law of attraction'). Avoid repetition and unnecessary sentences about both belief and hope—choose one clear stance.

例: Yes, I want my positive dreams to come true because I try to focus on positive goals. For instance, I visualize success and believe that by staying optimistic and working hard, those good outcomes are more likely to happen.

× Of course, I remember a lot of dreams since my childhood.

✓ Of course, I have remembered a lot of dreams since my childhood.

The sentence uses 'since my childhood' which requires the present perfect tense to link past time to the present. Use 'have remembered' rather than simple present 'remember' to indicate an action continuing from the past until now.

× I remember the nightmares and I also remember the good dreams because dreams are essential to me and I'm a little bit superstitious.

✓ I remember the nightmares and I also remember the good dreams because dreams are important to me and I'm a little bit superstitious.

The verb 'remember' is acceptable, but 'essential' is a strong adjective that sounds odd here; 'important' is more natural. This is an adjective choice improvement while keeping correct present tense usage.

× I do think that dreams will have certain effect on our future and will show as a sign of what we are doing so far.

✓ I do think that dreams will have a certain effect on our future and will show as a sign of what we have done so far.

Use the article 'a' before 'certain effect' (article error) and the present perfect 'have done' is required to describe actions up to now. Also 'effect on' is correct; adjusted tense makes the meaning clearer.

× Yeah I do share my dreams to others but primarily to my parents instead of my friends because I think dreams are a private topic to be talking about and I am interested in others dream because again I am superstitious.

✓ Yeah, I do share my dreams with others but primarily with my parents rather than my friends because I think dreams are a private topic to talk about and I am interested in others' dreams because, again, I am superstitious.

Use 'share with' not 'share to'. Use 'rather than' instead of 'instead of' for preference; 'to be talking about' should be 'to talk about'. Possessive form 'others' needs an apostrophe: 'others' dreams' -> 'others' dreams'. Commas improve clarity.

× I do think dreams will tell a person.

✓ I do think dreams can tell you something about a person.

Original sentence is vague and structurally weak. Reword to 'can tell you something about a person' to clearly express meaning and maintain proper modal usage ('can').

× Yes, of course, just like I said earlier, I am superstitious dream do carry on special meanings, especially for example when you are losing a teeth, it might means that you are going to lose a family member, but don't trust it all.

✓ Yes, of course. As I said earlier, I am superstitious; dreams do carry special meanings, for example, when you are losing a tooth it might mean that you are going to lose a family member, but don't trust it completely.

Sentence needed punctuation and clearer phrasing. Use 'dreams' plural and correct verb agreement 'do carry'. 'Carry on' is unnecessary. Change 'a teeth' to 'a tooth' (singular/plural error) and 'might means' to 'might mean' (subject-verb agreement). 'Don't trust it all' is informal; 'don't trust it completely' is clearer.

× Like you can believe in some parts of it but not all.

✓ You can believe some parts of it but not all.

Remove filler 'Like' at the start and simplify structure. Modal 'can' is fine; sentence tightened for naturalness.

× Yes, I would want my dreams come true as long as it is a good dream.

✓ Yes, I would want my dreams to come true as long as they are good dreams.

Use infinitive 'to come' after 'want'. Match plurality: 'dreams' with 'they are' and plural 'good dreams'. This fixes verb form and agreement.

× Honestly, I do believe that my dream will be manifested in the future for the good ones.

✓ Honestly, I do believe that my good dreams will be manifested in the future.

Reorder to place 'good' before 'dreams' and use plural agreement 'dreams will be manifested'. 'For the good ones' is awkward; integrate 'good' with 'dreams'.

× But for the nightmares, I hope it will not happen and I don't believe it will happen because I believe in the law of attraction.

✓ But for nightmares, I hope they will not happen and I don't believe they will because I believe in the law of attraction.

Use plural pronoun 'they' to agree with plural 'nightmares' (pronoun agreement). Repetition reduced for concision.

× As long as I don't want it happen, it won't happen.

✓ As long as I don't want it to happen, it won't happen.

Add 'to' before the verb 'happen' to form the correct infinitive 'to happen'. This fixes the verb structure error.