Dreams— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 表达要更自然和连贯。当前回答语法和时态混乱，冗长且信息不够清晰。注意使用主题句直接回答（I can remember my childhood dreams），随后用一两句支持细节并用连接词（but, then, now）说明转变。注意冠词（a/an/the）、职业词汇拼写（accountant）和时态一致。

例: I can remember my childhood dreams. When I was at school I wanted to be a scientist, but in senior high I became interested in accounting, so I decided to become an accountant. Now that dream has come true and I work as an accountant.

提案: 需要更直接和精确地表达原因与兴趣。避免口头语（uh）和模糊词（guys, stream）。使用连接词（because, so, and）使句子更连贯，并给出具体例子说明如何从他人那里获得帮助。

例: Yes, I often share my goals with classmates and teachers because their advice helps me improve. For example, a teacher suggested study resources and a classmate recommended internships that helped me gain practical experience.

提案: 回答含糊且有许多填充词。应直接表明观点并用一两个具体理由或例子支持。用更准确的词汇（purpose, motivation, inspiration）替换不清晰的表达，避免重复。

例: Yes, I believe dreams often reflect our ambitions and can motivate us. For instance, dreaming about a career path can inspire someone to study harder or gain relevant experience.

提案: 表达不够准确且存在词汇错误（go bored → go abroad）。应先明确回答，然后说明具体计划或原因。避免重复（really really）并使用正确词语（pass the English exam, go abroad, get a master's degree）。

例: Yes, I want to make my dream come true. Right now I am preparing to pass an English proficiency exam because I need it to study abroad and apply for a master's degree.

× I remember the one, I was a child in school, I dreamed to be a scientist in the future, but after I attended the Senior High School, I would like to be a accountant in the company. Currently, the dream come true and I was.

✓ I remember one: when I was a child in school, I dreamed of being a scientist. After I attended senior high school, I wanted to be an accountant in a company. Currently, the dream has come true and I am one.

句子中多处时态使用不当和不正确的动词形式： - “I was a child” 是过去时，需与后文过去的愿望一致，使用 “when I was a child” 更自然。 - “I dreamed to be” 是不正确的搭配，应使用 “dreamed of being” 表示渴望成为某人。 - “would like to be a accountant” 时态和冠词错误：想表达过去的愿望应使用过去时 “wanted to be”，并且 “accountant” 前需不定冠词 “an”。 - “Currently, the dream come true and I was.” 时态混乱且缺主系结构，现今实现应使用现在完成时或现在时描述结果：“the dream has come true and I am one”。 改进建议：注意过去时描述过去发生的愿望或经历（used/wanted/dreamed of + -ing形式），表达已实现的事用现在完成或现在时，并注意冠词使用。

× I dreamed to be a scientist in the future

✓ I dreamed of being a scientist in the future

动词 “dream” 后常用介词 “of” 或不带介词接动名词形式，正确搭配是 “dream of doing/being” 来表示梦想做某事或成为某人。建议记住固定搭配，使用 “dream of + -ing/ noun”。

× would like to be a accountant in the company

✓ wanted to be an accountant in a company

在英语中，单数可数名词前通常需要冠词。单词 “accountant” 前应使用不定冠词 “an” 而不是省略。并且 “the company” 暗指特定公司，原句应更泛化为 “a company” 如果没有特定指向。建议复习冠词用法：a/an 表示泛指，the 表示特指。

× Currently, the dream come true and I was.

✓ Currently, the dream has come true and I am one.

“the dream come true” 中缺少正确的时态标记，应该用现在完成时 “has come true” 表示到现在为止已经实现；“and I was” 用过去时不符合语境，描述现在的状态应使用现在时 “I am”。建议区分现在完成时（表示过去发生并与现在相关）和一般现在时。

× I also interested with other stream, it can be more interesting.

✓ I was also interested in other streams; they can be more interesting.

原句主谓不一致且介词使用错误： - “I also interested” 缺少正确的系动词，应为 “I was interested” 或 “I am interested”。 - “interested with” 搭配不当，正确介词为 “interested in”。 - “other stream” 单复数不匹配，若泛指多种领域应用复数 “streams”。 - 第二分句主语应与复数 streams 一致，故用 “they can be”。 建议练习主语与动词的一致性，并记忆动词搭配常用的介词（interested in）。

× I remembered I shared my dreams with my guys and classmates, even the teacher because I would like to observe more knowledge and solution for me to achieve my goals and I also interested with other stream, it can be more interesting.

✓ I remember I shared my dreams with my friends and classmates, even the teacher, because I wanted to learn more knowledge and solutions to help me achieve my goals. I was also interested in other streams; they could be more interesting.

存在时态和用词问题： - “I remembered” 用过去时但上下文应为一般现在或叙述过去经历，保留过去经历用 “I remember I shared” 或纯过去 “I remembered that I had shared”。 - “my guys” 不自然，应使用 “my friends”。 - “would like to observe more knowledge and solution for me to achieve my goals” 结构混乱，表达意图应为过去的愿望或行为，用 “wanted to learn more knowledge and solutions to help me achieve my goals”。 - “I also interested with” 同之前，需用系动词和正确介词 “I was interested in”。 建议：用简洁的句子表达过去经历，注意人称词汇和固定搭配（friends 而非 guys，interested in，learn knowledge/learn about）。

× Yes, of course, uh, from my perspective, uh, I think the dreams tend for the, uh, promo primary is thinking, uh, for your career, uh, or the future goals.

✓ Yes, of course. From my perspective, I think dreams primarily concern your career or future goals.

原句结构混乱且时态与词序不当： - “tend for the, promo primary is thinking” 语序和词汇使用错误，应表达“主要涉及/关注”，可用 “primarily concern”。 - 删除多余的语气填充词以便表达清晰。 建议使用简洁表达，注意动词搭配（tend to do sth 或 concern sth），并保持一致的时态。

× I dreamed of being a scientist

✓ I dreamed of being a scientist

句子本身在形式上正确（使用了 ”dreamed of + -ing“），此处保留为正确示例。说明：当使用 dream 表达愿望时，常用结构为 “dream of + -ing”。

× I think it will be the key for me to go bored and to get the master degree in the future.

✓ I think it will be the key for me to go abroad and to get a master's degree in the future.

原句有拼写和时态问题： - “go bored” 拼写错误，应为 “go abroad” 表示出国。 - “the master degree” 冠词和名词形式不当，应为 “a master's degree”。 建议注意常见拼写（abroad）和学位表达（a master's degree）。