Dreams— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 句子结构和表达需更自然、简洁；注意时态和词语搭配（如“remember dreaming”而非“remember I dreamed”）；尽量给出一到两个具体细节以丰富内容，但总句数不超过五句；可使用连接词（e.g. however, although）提高连贯性。

例: Yes, I often remember having dreams, but rarely the details. Sometimes I wake up with a strong feeling — for example, excitement or fear — although the images fade within minutes. However, if a dream is especially vivid, I can sometimes recall specific scenes.

提案: 回答较清楚但可以更自然并提供具体例子，使用连接词使句子流畅；注意时态和条件句的自然表达（e.g. "If I remember a dream, I like to share it"）。可补充说明与谁分享、为什么分享或别人通常的反应来丰富内容。

例: If I remember a dream clearly, I usually tell my close friends about it because they find dreams interesting. For example, last week I described a strange dream about flying and my friend laughed and said it meant I was carefree at the moment.

提案: 表达有语法和词汇错误，影响理解（如“refraction”用词不当；“is and simple”不通顺）。建议用更准确的词汇（reflect, represent, a symbol of）并用并列结构清晰区分观点，给出简短理由或例子。控制在一到三句内。

例: Yes, I think dreams can reflect things that happened during the day and also represent your feelings. For instance, stressful events may appear as nightmares, while happy experiences might show up as pleasant dreams.

提案: 答案表达基本明确但语言错误和不连贯（如时态、主谓一致、词序）。“make your dreams come true”通常指实现愿望，而考生误解为夜梦。建议先澄清问题意图，再回答；用正确时态和连接词并提供具体例子，控制句数。

例: I think you mean 'make dreams come true' as in realising goals — no, I don't try to do that with my night dreams because they are often nightmares caused by stress. For example, once I dreamt that monsters were chasing me and I woke up very scared, so I don't see those dreams as goals to pursue.

× I really remember I dreamed.

✓ I clearly remember dreaming.

句子时态与表达方式问题。原句中使用“I dreamed”显得生硬且与“remember”搭配不自然。常见说法是“remember + doing”或使用“clearly remember”来强调记忆。建议将动词改为动名词短语“remember dreaming”，并用“clearly”替换“really”以更符合习惯表达。

× Sometimes I wake up with some special feelings for having a dream, but I can't recall any clear details because the memory varies quickly after I wake up.

✓ Sometimes I wake up with special feelings from a dream, but I can't recall any clear details because the memory fades quickly after I wake up.

时态与搭配问题。原句中“for having a dream”搭配不当，英语中通常用“feelings from a dream”。此外“the memory varies quickly”用词不当，应为“memory fades quickly”表示记忆迅速消退。建议使用现在时一般描写经常发生的情况，并修正短语搭配。

× If I can remember something in my dream, I would like to share it with my friends.

✓ If I can remember something from my dream, I would like to share it with my friends.

情态动词与介词搭配问题。原句“If I can…”与“would like”搭配在条件句中造成语气不一致（与现实条件通常用“will”或将来时）。此外“remember something in my dream”介词用法不当，应为“remember something from my dream”。建议根据说话者意图选择一致的时态，例如“If I can remember... I will share...”或保持愿望语气则改介词为“from”。

× I will tell them the story I dreamed and share my feelings.

✓ I will tell them the story I dreamed about and share my feelings.

动词+ -ing / 介词搭配问题。原句“The story I dreamed”少了常用介词“about”或改为“that I dreamt”更自然。建议补上“about”或使用关系从句“that I dreamed”以使表达完整。

× Sure, on the one hand I think dream can refraction the things which is happened during the day.

✓ Sure. On the one hand, I think dreams can reflect the things that happened during the day.

时态、主谓一致与词汇使用错误。原句“dream”应为复数“dreams”以与“can”搭配更自然；“refraction”用词错误，正确动词为“reflect”；“which is happened”语法错误，应为“that happened”。建议注意主谓一致、正确词汇选择并使用简洁的关系代词结构。

× On the other hand I think dream is and simple of your feelings.

✓ On the other hand, I think dreams are a simple expression of your feelings.

代词与动词、句子结构错误。原句“dream is and simple of your feelings”结构混乱：缺少名词短语、连词“and”用错，且单复数不一致。建议将“dream”改为复数“dreams”，使用“are a simple expression of”来清晰表达“梦是你情感的简单表现”。

× No I don't because I often had a nightmare when I'm so stressful or anxiety during the day.

✓ No, I don't because I often have nightmares when I'm very stressed or anxious during the day.

时态与形容词/副词选择错误。原句“I often had a nightmare”时态不一致，应为现在时“often have nightmares”描述经常发生的情况；“I'm so stressful or anxiety”用法错误，应为“I'm very stressed or anxious”分别使用形容词“stressed/anxious”。建议使用一致的现在时并用正确形容词形式。

× For instance, I once dreamed that a group of monsters was catching me and it me feel scared.

✓ For instance, I once dreamed that a group of monsters was chasing me and it made me feel scared.

过去时与动词形式错误。原句“was catching me”不如“was chasing me”自然，且“it me feel scared”缺少动词，应为“it made me feel scared”。建议使用正确的过去时形式和常用动词搭配来表达过去的梦境经历。