Dreams— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise. Start with one clear topic sentence stating whether you can remember dreams, then add one short reason or example. Use correct tense and simpler phrases (e.g., "I don't usually remember my dreams") and avoid awkward words like "maintain in vagueness." Keep it to 1–2 sentences.

例: I don't usually remember my dreams. Often they fade quickly after I wake up, so only fragments remain.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and one specific supporting detail. Use correct grammar for past events and purpose clauses (e.g., "to see if"). Avoid repeating words. Keep to 1–3 sentences and use linking phrase such as "for example."

例: Yes, I often tell my family about my dreams. For example, this morning I had a horrible dream and I shared it with them to see if it might be related to something happening in my life.

提案: Answer directly and then give a cultural example. Use correct grammar (subject-verb agreement) and clearer phrasing for beliefs (e.g., "in Chinese culture, dreaming of a snake often means..."). Limit to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like "however" or "for example."

例: I'm not sure if all dreams have meanings. However, in Chinese culture, for example, dreaming of a snake is often believed to predict something good in your life.

提案: Be concise and correct conditional forms. Start with a clear general statement and then give two brief contrasting examples. Use simple conditionals ("If I dream about being a billionaire, I would like it to come true") and correct phrasing for dislike. Keep to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like "however" or "on the other hand."

例: Sometimes I would like my dreams to come true. For example, if I dream about being a billionaire, I would want that to happen; however, if I dream of being a rabbit, I would not want it to come true.

× I can't remember that dream in the night I had, but I can't always remember dreams because sometimes my dream maintain in vagueness.

✓ I can't remember the dream I had last night, and I can't always remember dreams because sometimes my dreams remain vague.

The sentence has multiple present tense and noun-number issues. 'in the night I had' is awkward; use 'last night'. 'my dream maintain in vagueness' uses incorrect verb and noun forms and verb agreement. Use plural 'dreams' with 'remain' and adjective 'vague' for clear English. Suggestion: simplify to 'I can't remember the dream I had last night' and use 'dreams remain vague' for general statements.

× Yes I do, for example like this morning I had a horrible dream and I share with my family to wondering if that is related to anything happen in my life.

✓ Yes I do; for example, this morning I had a horrible dream and I shared it with my family to wonder if it was related to anything happening in my life.

Errors include tense inconsistency and incorrect verb forms. 'I share' should match past 'I had' so use 'I shared'. 'to wondering' is wrong; use 'to wonder' or 'wondering' in a different structure. 'anything happen' needs progressive or past participle: 'anything happening' or 'anything that happened'. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense ('had' and 'shared') and use 'happening' for the possible relation.

× To be honest, I don't know, but for Chinese culture, for example, if you dream about the snake, that mean there will something good happen in your life.

✓ To be honest, I don't know, but in Chinese culture, for example, if you dream about a snake, that means something good will happen in your life.

Multiple issues: 'for Chinese culture' is better as 'in Chinese culture'. 'the snake' should be 'a snake' for a general example. 'that mean' needs third person singular 'means'. Word order 'there will something good happen' is incorrect; use 'something good will happen' or 'something good happens'. Suggestion: use 'a snake' and correct verb agreement and word order.

× Sometimes if I was dreaming about I'm busy in a billionaire, I definitely want my dream come true.

✓ Sometimes if I dream about being a billionaire, I definitely want my dream to come true.

This sentence mixes past and present and misuses expressions. 'If I was dreaming' should be simple present 'if I dream' for habitual or hypothetical. 'I'm busy in a billionaire' is incorrect: likely intended 'being a billionaire'. Use infinitive 'to come true'. Suggestion: use 'if I dream about being a billionaire' and 'want my dream to come true'.

× But by the contrast, if I dreaming I am a rabbit, I won't like it happen.

✓ But on the other hand, if I dreamed I was a rabbit, I wouldn't like it to happen.

Several tense and form errors. 'by the contrast' is unnatural; use 'on the other hand'. 'if I dreaming' should be 'if I dreamed' (or 'if I were dreaming'). 'I am a rabbit' should be past/subjunctive 'I was a rabbit' for hypothetical. 'I won't like it happen' needs conditional and infinitive: 'I wouldn't like it to happen'. Suggestion: use conditional mood consistently: 'if I dreamed I was a rabbit, I wouldn't like it to happen'.