Emails— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Améliorez la fluidité et la clarté de votre réponse en évitant les erreurs grammaticales et les répétitions. Utilisez des phrases complètes et évitez les pauses ou hésitations. Par exemple, structurez votre réponse avec une phrase principale claire suivie de détails spécifiques.

例: Yes, I often send emails to my professors to ask for feedback on my assignments or to clarify parts I don't understand. They usually respond promptly and helpfully.

提案: Travaillez sur la cohérence et la précision de vos phrases. Évitez les erreurs grammaticales et les phrases incomplètes. Utilisez des mots de liaison pour rendre votre réponse plus fluide et logique.

例: I usually send emails when I have questions about my lessons or need clarification on certain topics, so I can understand the material better.

提案: Essayez de répondre directement à la question sans hésitation. Évitez les phrases fragmentées et améliorez la structure en utilisant des connecteurs logiques pour exprimer votre opinion clairement.

例: Although I'm not from China, I believe that sending emails is quite popular there, as it is in many countries, because email remains a common way to communicate professionally.

提案: Clarifiez votre opinion en évitant les erreurs et en structurant mieux votre réponse. Utilisez des mots de liaison pour expliquer vos raisons de manière cohérente et naturelle.

例: I think emails will become less popular in the future because there are faster and more efficient ways to communicate, such as instant messaging apps, which allow quicker responses.

× I often send emails to my professors to receive feedbacks on my.

✓ I often send emails to my professors to receive feedback on my.

The word 'feedback' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized as 'feedbacks'. Use 'feedback' without 's'.

× Assignments or send my request on the the parts that.

✓ Assignments or send my requests on the parts that I don't really understand.

The sentence is incomplete and fragmented. It needs to be combined properly to form a complete sentence. Also, 'request' should be plural 'requests' to match the context.

× I would send emails when I have a problems that I want to clarify or a part of my lessons that I don't really understand.

✓ I would send emails when I have problems that I want to clarify or a part of my lessons that I don't really understand.

The phrase 'a problems' is incorrect because 'problems' is plural and cannot be preceded by 'a'. Remove 'a' to correct the plural usage.

× I'd send emails to receipt. Response and to understand it better.

✓ I'd send emails to receive responses and to understand it better.

The words 'receipt' and 'Response' are incorrectly used. The correct verbs are 'receive' and the noun 'responses' (plural). Also, the sentence structure is corrected for clarity.

× But I think. It's quite popular in China, Anne in other countries too, because in today's world sending emails is becoming more and more popular.

✓ But I think it's quite popular in China, and in other countries too, because in today's world sending emails is becoming more and more popular.

The word 'Anne' is a typo and should be 'and'. Also, the period after 'think' is unnecessary and breaks the sentence.

× I think sending emails will be left popular in the future because we have more effective ways to communicate faster an more effectively rather than sending emails because it takes longer to someone to receive emails and then respond to it.

✓ I think sending emails will be less popular in the future because we have more effective ways to communicate faster and more effectively rather than sending emails because it takes longer for someone to receive emails and then respond to them.

The phrase 'will be left popular' is incorrect; it should be 'will be less popular'. Also, 'an' should be 'and'. The phrase 'to someone' should be 'for someone', and 'respond to it' should be 'respond to them' to agree with the plural 'emails'.