Emails— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant and clear, but it can be improved by avoiding redundancy and using linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, try to use more varied vocabulary to express your points.

例: Yes, I often send emails, primarily for work purposes because they facilitate professional communication. Additionally, I use emails to stay connected with friends who live far away, which helps maintain our relationships.

提案: Your answer has some grammatical errors and lacks linking words. Try to use the present tense consistently and connect your ideas with appropriate linking words. Also, provide more specific details to enrich your answer.

例: I usually send emails when I need to apply for a job or communicate with official institutions such as banks because emails are suitable for serious and formal communication.

提案: There are grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing in your answer. Use correct subject-verb agreement and clearer expressions. Also, include linking words to make your answer more coherent and add specific examples.

例: Yes, sending emails is very popular in China. Many companies use emails to discuss business matters and to send important documents to their employees, which helps improve efficiency.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains several errors. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Use linking words properly to contrast ideas. Also, clarify your points with specific reasons and examples.

例: I believe that sending emails will remain popular in the future because as companies expand globally, emails provide an effective way to communicate across different time zones. However, other messaging apps might also become popular for quick and informal conversations.

× I sent e-mail when I need to apply for a job or to talk to official places like banks and they are important for serious communication.

✓ I send e-mails when I need to apply for a job or to talk to official places like banks, and they are important for serious communication.

The sentence mixes past tense 'sent' with present tense 'need'. Since the action is habitual, present tense 'send' should be used to maintain consistency and correctness.

× Yes, sending emails are popular in China.

✓ Yes, sending emails is popular in China.

The subject 'sending emails' is singular (gerund phrase), so the verb should be singular 'is' instead of 'are' to agree in number.

× Many companies used e-mail to talk related business and to send important documents to their employees.

✓ Many companies use e-mail to discuss related business and to send important documents to their employees.

The sentence refers to a general fact, so present tense 'use' is appropriate instead of past tense 'used'. Also, 'talk related business' is incorrect; 'discuss related business' is the correct collocation.

× Many companies used e-mail to talk related business and to send important documents to their employees.

✓ Many companies use e-mail to discuss related business and to send important documents to their employees.

The verb 'use' must agree with the plural subject 'companies'. Also, 'talk related business' is incorrect; 'discuss related business' is the correct phrase.

× Yes, I think sending image will be more popular in the future as companies growing worldwide emails help to communicate across the globe in different time.

✓ Yes, I think sending images will be more popular in the future as companies grow worldwide. Emails help to communicate across the globe at different times.

'Image' should be plural 'images' to match the context. 'Companies growing' should be 'companies grow' to form a correct clause. Also, 'in different time' should be 'at different times' for correct preposition and plural form.

× Jones however, however, other messaging apps might also become popular for quick conversation.

✓ However, other messaging apps might also become popular for quick conversation.

The repeated use of 'however' is incorrect. Only one 'however' is needed at the beginning of the sentence to connect the ideas properly.