Emails— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议简化句子结构，明确表达工作内容和发送邮件的原因。

例: Yes, I often send emails because my job involves editing images and analyzing data. I use emails to propose my programs and projects to my boss.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不完整，建议使用连贯的句子，清楚说明发送邮件的时间和原因。

例: I send emails whenever I have a new project idea because it is very convenient. The recipient can read the email at a suitable time.

提案: 回答不完整且表达混乱，建议简洁明了地说明电子邮件在中国的普及情况，并避免语法错误。

例: Yes, sending emails is very popular in China. People use emails for both work and personal communication because it is convenient.

提案: 回答中有词汇错误和表达不清晰，建议使用正确词汇并清楚说明原因。

例: I think sending emails will become more popular in the future because in busy and noisy environments, emails are more convenient to read and keep a record than phone calls.

× Yes, I open send the emails because my work involved in involve my work involving images editing and the data analyzes using emails to propose my programs and projects to my boss.

✓ Yes, I often send emails because my work involves image editing and data analysis, and I use emails to propose my programs and projects to my boss.

句中“open send”应为“often send”，且“involved in involve my work involving”结构混乱，应简化为“my work involves”。“images editing”应为“image editing”，“data analyzes”应为“data analysis”。这些都是动词和名词形式的错误，需使用正确的现在分词和名词形式。

× Yes, I open send the emails because my work involved in involve my work involving images editing and the data analyzes using emails to propose my programs and projects to my boss.

✓ Yes, I often send emails because my work involves image editing and data analysis, and I use emails to propose my programs and projects to my boss.

“the emails”不应加定冠词，且“images editing”应为不可数名词“image editing”，“data analyzes”应为不可数名词“data analysis”，需注意单复数和不可数名词的正确使用。

× Yes, I open send the emails because my work involved in involve my work involving images editing and the data analyzes using emails to propose my programs and projects to my boss.

✓ Yes, I often send emails because my work involves image editing and data analysis, and I use emails to propose my programs and projects to my boss.

“involved”使用了过去式，但句意为现在的工作内容，应使用现在时态“involve”或“involves”。

× Whenever I have a project over some knew idea, I will send the e-mail to others because they it is a very convenient and the person who received my e-mail can choose the right time for them to read the information.

✓ Whenever I have a project or some new idea, I will send an email to others because it is very convenient, and the person who receives my email can choose the right time to read the information.

“will”用法正确，但“they it is a very convenient”结构错误，应为“it is very convenient”。“knew”应为“new”。“the person who received”应为现在时“receives”，保持时态一致。

× Whenever I have a project over some knew idea, I will send the e-mail to others because they it is a very convenient and the person who received my e-mail can choose the right time for them to read the information.

✓ Whenever I have a project or some new idea, I will send an email to others because it is very convenient, and the person who receives my email can choose the right time to read the information.

“over some knew idea”中“over”用法不当，应改为“or”。“to read the information”中“for them to read”结构冗余，简化为“to read”。

× Whenever I have a project over some knew idea, I will send the e-mail to others because they it is a very convenient and the person who received my e-mail can choose the right time for them to read the information.

✓ Whenever I have a project or some new idea, I will send an email to others because it is very convenient, and the person who receives my email can choose the right time to read the information.

“they it is a very convenient”中“they”多余，应去掉。

× Yes, sending e-mail is very popular in China and we will use the e-mail to communicate, including works or personal.

✓ Yes, sending emails is very popular in China, and we use emails to communicate, including work or personal matters.

“e-mail”应复数形式“emails”，且“works”应为不可数名词“work”。

× Yes, sending e-mail is very popular in China and we will use the e-mail to communicate, including works or personal.

✓ Yes, sending emails is very popular in China, and we use emails to communicate, including work or personal matters.

“including works or personal”结构不完整，应补充“matters”或改为“work or personal matters”。

× Information and the writing e-mail is very convenient, even by.

✓ Writing emails is very convenient, even on mobile devices.

原句结构不完整且含糊，应重组为完整句子，表达“写邮件非常方便，即使在手机上也可以”。

× Information and the writing e-mail is very convenient, even by.

✓ Writing emails is very convenient, even on mobile devices.

“the writing e-mail”中“the”使用不当，应去掉或改为“writing emails”。

× I think the sending e-mail will be more popular in the future because when we work in the busy, noisy environment, e-mail will be better than Franco because it's more convenient to read and have a record.

✓ I think sending emails will be more popular in the future because when we work in busy, noisy environments, emails will be better than phone calls because they're more convenient to read and keep a record.

“the sending e-mail”中“the”多余，应去掉；“Franco”应为“phone calls”；“e-mail”应复数“emails”；“it's”指代不清，应改为“they're”指代“emails”。

× I think the sending e-mail will be more popular in the future because when we work in the busy, noisy environment, e-mail will be better than Franco because it's more convenient to read and have a record.

✓ I think sending emails will be more popular in the future because when we work in busy, noisy environments, emails will be better than phone calls because they're more convenient to read and keep a record.

“in the busy, noisy environment”中“the”不必要，应去掉；“environment”应复数“environments”以匹配泛指。