Emails— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly to the question with a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

例: Yes, I often send emails, especially for work and academic purposes. For instance, I regularly check my inbox to stay updated on important articles and submit necessary documents. This helps me manage my tasks efficiently.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be more structured and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then provide specific details using linking words. Avoid repetition and improve sentence clarity.

例: I usually send emails when I need to communicate important information. For example, two days ago, I emailed my husband to check an issue with my immigration documents, and he replied quickly. I find emails very convenient for such matters.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Use linking words to connect ideas and be more specific. Also, avoid redundancy and improve vocabulary usage.

例: Sending emails is not very popular among young people in China. Instead, they prefer using apps like Instagram, Telegram, and WhatsApp. Emails are mainly used for professional and academic purposes rather than everyday communication.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and coherence. Try to give a clear opinion supported by specific reasons and examples. Use linking words to organise your ideas logically and avoid vague statements.

例: I believe that sending emails will become less popular in the future because many people now prefer instant messaging apps like Instagram and Telegram. Additionally, with the rise of AI technologies, communication methods may change significantly.

× Yes, I sent e-mail from time to time.

✓ Yes, I send e-mails from time to time.

The sentence refers to a habitual action, so the present tense 'send' should be used instead of the past tense 'sent'. Also, 'e-mail' should be plural as it refers to multiple emails.

× Yes, I sent e-mail from time to time.

✓ Yes, I send e-mails from time to time.

The noun 'e-mail' should be plural 'e-mails' when referring to multiple messages.

× I have to message about lots of different articles and I sometimes have to submit that these articles.

✓ I have to message about lots of different articles and I sometimes have to submit these articles.

The word 'that' is unnecessary and incorrect before 'these articles'. Removing 'that' corrects the sentence.

× So I usually check my inbox and like to be updated.

✓ So I usually check my inbox and like to stay updated.

The phrase 'like to be updated' is awkward; 'like to stay updated' is the correct expression.

× I recall that if I'm not mistaken, it was 2 days ago.

✓ I recall that, if I'm not mistaken, it was two days ago.

Numbers below ten should be written in words in formal writing; adding commas improves clarity.

× I sent an important message and e-mail for my husband to and ask him to check an important issue regarding my immigration documents and he replied it promptly.

✓ I sent an important message and e-mail to my husband and asked him to check an important issue regarding my immigration documents, and he replied promptly.

The preposition 'for' is incorrect here; 'to' is correct. Also, 'to' after 'husband' is unnecessary. The verb 'ask' should be in past tense 'asked' to match the past context. 'Replied it' is incorrect; 'replied' does not take an object.

× he replied it promptly.

✓ he replied promptly.

The verb 'reply' is intransitive and does not take a direct object, so 'it' should be removed.

× Emails, really emails are really convenient.

✓ Emails, really, are very convenient.

Adding commas improves readability; 'really' is repeated unnecessarily; 'very' is a better adverb here.

× Most people, teenager, young people or people prefer to use other software and application like Instagram, Telegram and WhatsApp rather than using emails.

✓ Most people, teenagers, young people, or others prefer to use other software and applications like Instagram, Telegram, and WhatsApp rather than using emails.

'Teenager' should be plural 'teenagers' to match 'people'. 'Application' should be plural 'applications' to match 'software'. Added commas for clarity.

× e-mail is really used for professional and academic area rather than use for ordinary people.

✓ E-mail is really used in professional and academic areas rather than by ordinary people.

The preposition 'for' is incorrect; 'in' is appropriate for areas. Also, 'use for' should be 'used by'. 'Area' should be plural 'areas'.

× Actually I don't know what the future holds, but nowadays there is a trend to use Instagram and Telegram and in the in the future AI is really important engine.

✓ Actually, I don't know what the future holds, but nowadays there is a trend to use Instagram and Telegram, and in the future, AI will be a really important engine.

Added commas for clarity. Removed repeated 'in the'. Added 'will be' to indicate future tense properly.

× Most people prefer to use AI rather than other website and sometimes.

✓ Most people prefer to use AI rather than other websites sometimes.

'Website' should be plural 'websites' to match 'other'. 'Sometimes' should be placed at the end for correct adverb placement.