Emails— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains several errors that affect understanding. Avoid irrelevant or incorrect words like 'Yachts' and ensure subject-verb agreement. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific supporting details using linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, I often send emails, especially to my teachers and family members. For instance, I usually email my teachers to submit assignments because it is a convenient and quick way to communicate.

提案: Your answer is generally relevant but contains some awkward phrasing and minor grammatical errors. Use clearer expressions such as 'check their inbox' instead of 'take their inbox'. Also, avoid redundancy and ensure sentences are concise and coherent by using appropriate linking words.

例: I usually send emails during working hours, particularly in the morning or early afternoon when people are more likely to check their inbox. For example, I often email my teachers in the morning to submit assignments.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors. Begin with a direct response, then provide specific reasons using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid vague phrases and ensure your ideas are logically connected.

例: Although I don't live in China, I believe sending emails is very popular there. This is because emails are a convenient and useful way for individuals to stay connected.

提案: Your answer has some good points but is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Use clear linking words like 'firstly' and 'secondly', and explain your ideas fully with specific details. Avoid vague expressions such as 'improve your life scale'.

例: In my opinion, sending emails will become more popular in the future. Firstly, emails are very convenient and useful for most people. Secondly, they help people stay connected, especially young people who rely on digital communication.

× Absolutely. Yachts are often sent emails, especially for my teachers and my mothers because I always send a assignment for a teacher in an e-mail and I think it's very convenient for everyone to use.

✓ Absolutely. I often send emails, especially to my teachers and my mother because I always send an assignment to a teacher by e-mail and I think it's very convenient for everyone to use.

The word 'Yachts' is incorrect and irrelevant here; it should be 'I'. 'Mothers' should be singular 'mother' if referring to one. 'A assignment' should be 'an assignment' because 'assignment' starts with a vowel sound. Also, 'sent emails' is incorrect; the subject 'I' sends emails, not 'Yachts'. The preposition 'for' should be 'to' when referring to recipients of emails.

× I always send a assignment for a teacher in an e-mail

✓ I always send an assignment to a teacher by e-mail

The preposition 'for' is incorrect when indicating the recipient of an email; 'to' is the correct preposition. Also, 'in an e-mail' is better expressed as 'by e-mail' to indicate the means of sending.

× I usually send emails during working hours, especially in the morning or early afternoon when people are most likely to take their inbox.

✓ I usually send emails during working hours, especially in the morning or early afternoon when people are most likely to check their inbox.

The phrase 'take their inbox' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'check' when referring to looking at emails in an inbox.

× For example, I might e-mail for my teachers in the morning to send a an assignment.

✓ For example, I might e-mail my teachers in the morning to send an assignment.

The preposition 'for' is unnecessary here; 'e-mail my teachers' is correct. Also, 'a an assignment' is redundant; only 'an assignment' is needed.

× Of course I don't live in China, but I think people is very popular sending emails because I think it's very convenient and useful for almost everyone is have individuals connect with them.

✓ Of course I don't live in China, but I think sending emails is very popular because I think it's very convenient and useful for almost everyone to connect with others.

'People is' is incorrect; 'people are' or 'sending emails is popular' is correct. The phrase 'almost everyone is have individuals connect with them' is ungrammatical; it should be 'almost everyone to connect with others' to express purpose.

× Secondly is have people connect with them and can improve your life scale of almost young people.

✓ Secondly, it helps people connect with others and can improve the lifestyle of most young people.

The original sentence lacks a clear subject and verb structure. 'Secondly is have people connect' is incorrect; it should be 'Secondly, it helps people connect'. Also, 'life scale' is incorrect; 'lifestyle' is the correct term. The modal verb 'can' is used correctly but needs a proper subject.