Emails— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は意味が伝わりますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現があり、内容もやや不明瞭です。例えば、「for work purpose」は「for work purposes」や「for work-related reasons」とするのが自然です。また、「avoiding A traveler or with customers」の部分は意味が不明瞭なので、具体的に何を避けたいのか明確に説明しましょう。

例: I sometimes send emails, especially for work purposes. Emails are essential because they provide written records that help avoid misunderstandings with clients or colleagues.

提案: 回答は質問に答えていますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現があります。例えば、「in online」は「online」とするのが正しいです。また、「messaging apps such as Microsoft」は不完全で、Microsoft Teamsなど具体的なアプリ名を挙げると良いでしょう。接続詞を使って文をつなげるとより自然です。

例: I use emails when I need to keep a written record of our conversations online. However, for quick communication with colleagues, I prefer messaging apps such as Microsoft Teams.

提案: 回答は意味が伝わりにくく、文法や語彙の誤りが多いです。否定の二重表現（"don't think e-mail is not so popular"）は避けましょう。また、後半の文は意味が不明瞭なので、簡潔で明確な表現に改善してください。

例: No, I don't think email is very popular, especially among young people. Most of them prefer using messaging apps like WhatsApp or Microsoft Teams.

提案: 回答は質問に適切に答えていますが、文法の誤りや単数・複数の不一致があります。例えば、「messaging app」は「messaging apps」と複数形にし、"which makes our communication smooth"は"which makes communication smoother"の方が自然です。接続詞を使って文をつなげると良いでしょう。

例: I think that sending emails will become less popular in the future because we can easily communicate using messaging apps, which makes communication smoother.

× I sometimes send emails, especially for work purpose.

✓ I sometimes send emails, especially for work purposes.

The phrase 'work purpose' is incorrect because 'purpose' is countable and usually used in plural form when referring to general reasons or uses. Therefore, 'work purposes' is the correct form.

× e-mail is essential because written records are necessary for avoiding A traveler or with customers.

✓ Email is essential because written records are necessary for avoiding misunderstandings with customers or travelers.

The original sentence is unclear and contains a fragment 'A traveler or with customers' which does not make sense. The correction clarifies the meaning by specifying 'avoiding misunderstandings with customers or travelers.' Also, 'e-mail' should be capitalized as 'Email' at the beginning of the sentence.

× When I have to record the written conversation in online, I use emails.

✓ When I have to record the written conversation online, I use emails.

The preposition 'in' is incorrectly used before 'online.' The correct preposition is omitted; 'online' functions as an adverb here, so 'in' should be removed.

× Are real kids of the company were students attended to use a messaging app such as WhatsApp app or Microsoft Teams?

✓ Most young people in the company or students tend to use messaging apps such as WhatsApp or Microsoft Teams.

The original sentence is grammatically incorrect and unclear. 'Are real kids of the company were students attended to use' is not proper English. The correction uses 'Most young people' to quantify and clarifies the subject and verb agreement. Also, 'WhatsApp app' is redundant; 'WhatsApp' suffices.

× No, I don't think e-mail is not so popular, especially among young people.

✓ No, I don't think email is very popular, especially among young people.

The original sentence contains a double negative 'don't think' and 'not so popular,' which is confusing. The correction removes the double negative for clarity. Also, 'e-mail' is modernly written as 'email.'

× I think that the habits of sending emails will be less popular in the future because we can easily communicate using messaging app which makes our communication smooth.

✓ I think that the habit of sending emails will be less popular in the future because we can easily communicate using messaging apps, which makes our communication smoother.

'Habit' should be singular when referring to a general practice. 'Messaging app' should be plural 'messaging apps' to indicate multiple apps. Also, 'smooth' should be the comparative form 'smoother' to describe improvement in communication.