Emails— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is a bit long and lacks clarity. Try to make your response more concise and structured by directly answering the question first, then giving a clear reason. Avoid redundancy and incomplete sentences.

例: I don't often send emails, but I usually email my father to print PDFs for me because it's easier to study from paper than on a screen.

提案: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Focus on giving a direct answer first, then add specific examples with linking words to make your response coherent and complete.

例: I send emails when I need to share important information, especially to my teachers if they ask for assignments or deadlines.

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and incomplete. Try to use linking words to connect ideas and complete your sentences. Also, be specific about why people prefer WeChat over emails.

例: Sending emails is popular in China, but most people prefer WeChat because it is easier and faster for communication.

提案: Your answer is clear but can be improved by avoiding repetition and using linking words to make it more natural and effective.

例: I believe emails will become less popular in the future because new apps will be developed that offer easier and faster communication.

× I rarely send emails to people, but I frequently send to my father to take print out of a particular PDF so that I can study with it properly, because on screen it is not very clear and to my friends I also get e-mail.

✓ I rarely send emails to people, but I frequently send emails to my father to take a printout of a particular PDF so that I can study it properly, because on screen it is not very clear, and I also get emails from my friends.

The phrase 'take print out' should be 'take a printout' because 'printout' is a singular noun and requires an article 'a'. Also, 'send to my father' is incomplete; it should be 'send emails to my father'. Additionally, 'to my friends I also get e-mail' is incorrect; it should be 'I also get emails from my friends' to correctly express receiving emails. These corrections address singular/plural noun usage and sentence clarity.

× When I would be asked to send emails to others, I would probably send it to the people for important information and to the teachers if they ask for certain task to complete of the deadlines and I would also give the emails to.

✓ When I am asked to send emails to others, I probably send them to people for important information and to teachers if they ask for certain tasks to be completed by the deadlines, and I also send emails to others.

Using 'would' in 'When I would be asked' is incorrect; the correct form is 'When I am asked' to indicate a general condition. Also, 'send it' should be 'send them' to agree with the plural 'emails'. The phrase 'certain task to complete of the deadlines' is incorrect; it should be 'certain tasks to be completed by the deadlines'. The sentence was incomplete and unclear, so it was rephrased for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Sending emails is very much popular in China and along with WhatsApp, share chat, Facebook, Instagram. But usually people prefer WeChat rather than the emails because it is it is very much easier and.

✓ Sending emails is very popular in China, along with WhatsApp, ShareChat, Facebook, and Instagram. But usually, people prefer WeChat rather than emails because it is much easier.

The original sentence had incorrect conjunction use and sentence fragments. 'And along with' is incorrect; it should be 'along with' to list items. 'Share chat' should be 'ShareChat' as a proper noun. The phrase 'it is it is very much easier and' is incomplete and repetitive; it should be 'it is much easier'. Also, 'the emails' is incorrect; 'emails' without 'the' is appropriate here.

× In my personal opinion, I think sending emails would be less popular in the future because there would be many other apps that would be created by the future generation, so it would be less popular.

✓ In my personal opinion, I think sending emails will be less popular in the future because many other apps will be created by future generations, so it will be less popular.

Using 'would' in this context is incorrect because the sentence talks about a future prediction. The correct modal verb is 'will' to indicate future certainty or strong likelihood. Also, 'the future generation' should be 'future generations' to indicate plural and general sense. These changes correct modal verb usage and singular/plural issues.