Emails— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your response more natural and concise by directly answering the question first, then providing specific reasons with clear linking words. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure for better clarity.

例: I don't often send emails because I usually use WhatsApp to communicate with my friends and classmates. However, when I need to submit presentations to my teachers, I prefer to use email because it is more formal and convenient for sharing documents with a group.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but lacks fluency and contains grammatical mistakes. Use clear topic sentences and linking words to organize your ideas logically. Also, be specific and avoid incomplete sentences to make your answer more effective.

例: I usually send emails when I need to have formal conversations, especially with my teachers. For example, last week I submitted a presentation for a college project via email because it was a simple and convenient way to share my work.

提案: Your answer is somewhat vague and contains awkward phrasing. Try to directly answer the question with a clear opinion, then support it with specific reasons using appropriate linking words. Avoid unnecessary phrases and improve sentence structure for clarity.

例: Although I have never been to China, I believe that sending emails is popular there, especially for formal communication with colleagues and teachers. This is because emails provide a convenient way to keep records that can be used as evidence later.

提案: Your answer has good ideas but is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to express your opinion clearly and support it with specific reasons using linking words. Also, avoid awkward phrases and improve vocabulary usage for a more natural response.

例: I think emails will become less popular in the future because many people prefer using social media platforms like Instagram or Snapchat to communicate with friends. However, emails will still be used for formal conversations and sending presentations to teachers.

× Emails No.

✓ No, emails.

The original sentence incorrectly places 'Emails' at the beginning without proper structure. The correction places 'No' first to answer the question properly and uses 'emails' as a plural noun correctly.

× Most of the times I prefer to send a messages on my WhatsApp groups and there I can do anything well.

✓ Most of the time I prefer to send messages on my WhatsApp groups and there I can do anything well.

The phrase 'Most of the times' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'Most of the time' (singular). Also, 'a messages' is incorrect because 'messages' is plural and should not have the article 'a'.

× However, sometime when I have to submit my presentations with my teachers at a time, I prefer to use their emails because it is a provider conveniently way and apart from it last time I have a presentations related to involvement aggregations and I need to share with whole groups of my classmates.

✓ However, sometimes when I have to submit my presentations to my teachers at once, I prefer to use their emails because it is a more convenient way. Also, last time I had a presentation related to involvement aggregations and I needed to share it with the whole group of my classmates.

The word 'sometime' should be 'sometimes' to indicate frequency. The preposition 'with' is incorrect when submitting presentations; 'to' is correct. 'At a time' is better expressed as 'at once'. 'Provider conveniently way' is incorrect; it should be 'a more convenient way'. 'I have a presentations' should be 'I had a presentation' to match tense and number. 'Share with whole groups' should be 'share it with the whole group' for clarity and correctness.

× Let me can take an example of myself last week.

✓ Let me take an example from last week.

The phrase 'Let me can take' is incorrect; 'can' is unnecessary here. Also, 'an example of myself' is awkward; 'an example from last week' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× I have to submit my presentations related to my college projects and at a time I prefer to use the emails because it's providing a convenient or simple way to share my.

✓ I had to submit my presentations related to my college projects and at that time I preferred to use emails because they provided a convenient and simple way to share them.

The sentence refers to a past event, so 'have to' should be 'had to', 'prefer' should be 'preferred', and 'it's providing' should be 'they provided' to maintain past tense consistency. Also, 'share my' is incomplete and should be 'share them' referring to presentations.

× Well, in my life, I have never visited in China and I don't know about their popularity among people related to the emails.

✓ Well, in my life, I have never visited China and I don't know about the popularity of emails among people there.

The verb 'visited' does not require the preposition 'in' before a country name. Also, 'their popularity among people related to the emails' is awkward; it is clearer to say 'the popularity of emails among people there'.

× But however, I feel that most of your time when the people need to do a formal conversation with their colleagues, teachers at a time, they prefer to use the emails because it's providing a convenient way.

✓ However, I feel that most of the time when people need to have a formal conversation with their colleagues or teachers, they prefer to use emails because it provides a convenient way.

'Most of your time' is incorrect; it should be 'most of the time'. 'Do a formal conversation' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'have a formal conversation'. 'The emails' should be 'emails' without 'the' in this context. 'It's providing' should be 'it provides' for correct tense and subject-verb agreement.

× And in this way they got a chance to maintain some records that they can also use as an evidence in the future time.

✓ And in this way, they get a chance to maintain some records that they can also use as evidence in the future.

'Got' should be 'get' to maintain present tense in this general statement. 'An evidence' is incorrect because 'evidence' is uncountable and does not take an article. 'In the future time' is better expressed as 'in the future'.

× Sure. Well, I think that the e-mail should not be popular in our future because nowadays people are very addicted to use this social media platform like Instagram or Snapchat whenever they even want to conversate with their friends or create an elephant memory.

✓ Sure. Well, I think that email will not be popular in our future because nowadays people are very addicted to using social media platforms like Instagram or Snapchat whenever they want to communicate with their friends or create lasting memories.

'Should not be popular' is incorrect for prediction; 'will not be popular' is appropriate. 'Addicted to use' should be 'addicted to using' because 'addicted to' is followed by a gerund. 'Conversate' is not standard English; 'communicate' is correct. 'An elephant memory' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'lasting memories' or 'a good memory'.

× However, sometime in at the time of doing the formal conversations or sending some their presentations to their teachers at a time, they prefer to use the emails.

✓ However, sometimes when doing formal conversations or sending their presentations to their teachers, they prefer to use emails.

'Sometime in at the time' is incorrect; 'sometimes when' is correct. 'The formal conversations' should be 'formal conversations' without 'the'. 'Some their presentations' is incorrect; 'their presentations' is correct. 'At a time' is unnecessary and awkward here. 'The emails' should be 'emails' without 'the'.