Emails— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，建议简化句子结构，避免重复和多余的词汇，同时注意时态和介词的正确使用。

例: Yes, I send emails almost every day because I need to communicate with my clients and colleagues for work.

提案: 回答中有词汇使用错误（如'category'和'vote'），表达不清晰，建议使用正确的词汇并简洁明了地回答问题。

例: I usually send emails to my clients at work because email is a formal way to keep in touch with them.

提案: 回答表达较为清楚，但存在语法错误和词汇搭配不当，建议注意冠词使用和形容词顺序，提升表达的准确性。

例: I think sending emails is not very popular in China because most people prefer using WeChat, which is more convenient and faster.

提案: 回答中有严重语法错误和表达不完整，建议练习完整句子表达，避免口语填充词，清晰表达观点。

例: I think emails may become less popular in the future because there are many other faster communication methods available.

× Yes umm, because I'm working so I almost every day using the e-mail and I need to contact with my clients and also connect with my colleagues because I've got the confidential offer from the University of London I.

✓ Yes, umm, because I'm working, so I almost every day use the e-mail and I need to contact my clients and also connect with my colleagues because I've got the confidential offer from the University of London.

这里“using”用法错误，应该用动词原形“use”来表达习惯性动作。动词+ing形式通常表示正在进行的动作，而此处表达的是经常性的行为，应使用一般现在时。

× I need to contact with my clients and also connect with my colleagues because I've got the confidential offer from the University of London I.

✓ I need to contact my clients and also connect with my colleagues because I've got the confidential offer from the University of London.

动词“contact”后不需要介词“with”，直接加宾语即可。错误使用介词会导致表达不自然。

× Well, especially at work I will category with my clients by emails because I think the e-mail is quite formal method to keep in touch with others.

✓ Well, especially at work I will communicate with my clients by emails because I think the e-mail is quite a formal method to keep in touch with others.

原句中“category”用词错误，应为“communicate”。此外，“emails”前应加冠词“a”，表示“一种正式的方式”。

× Well, especially at work I will category with my clients by emails because I think the e-mail is quite formal method to keep in touch with others.

✓ Well, especially at work I will communicate with my clients by emails because I think the e-mail is quite a formal method to keep in touch with others.

“communicate”后应加介词“with”表示“与……交流”，缺少介词导致语法错误。

× I think the e-mail is quite formal method to keep in touch with others.

✓ I think the e-mail is quite a formal method to keep in touch with others.

“formal method”前缺少不定冠词“a”，因为“method”是可数名词，单数形式前需要冠词。

× If I just vote them directly, I think it's a little bit umm plight.

✓ If I just call them directly, I think it's a little bit umm impolite.

“vote”用词错误，应为“call”；“plight”拼写错误，应为“impolite”，表示“不礼貌”。

× MMM well I think sending e-mail in China is not very popular because most of the time the people will choose the WeChat app to communicate with others because the feature app is more convenient and the quick.

✓ MMM well I think sending e-mail in China is not very popular because most of the time people will choose the WeChat app to communicate with others because the app is more convenient and quicker.

“the people”应为“people”表示泛指；“feature app”应为“app”；“the quick”应为“quicker”，形容词比较级形式。

× because the feature app is more convenient and the quick.

✓ because the app is more convenient and quicker.

“quick”应使用比较级“quicker”来与“more convenient”并列，且不需要冠词“the”。

× Well, I think this is a really tricky questions, you know, umm, I don't have a disability to pay predict the future, but I would say the e-mail we may be less popular because, you know, there are variety of.

✓ Well, I think this is a really tricky question, you know, umm, I don't have the ability to predict the future, but I would say the e-mail may be less popular because, you know, there are a variety of.

“questions”应为单数“question”；“disability”用词错误，应为“ability”；“pay predict”错误，应为“predict”；“variety of”前应加冠词“a”。