Emails— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No) then give one or two specific reasons or examples. Avoid filler words (but, like) and incorrect phrases (chap in study). Keep to 2–3 sentences and use correct collocations (ask for advice, send an email).

例: Yes. I often send emails to friends when they ask for advice about everyday matters, such as study problems. For example, last week a friend asked how to manage revision time, so I wrote an email with a study schedule and some tips, which helped them a lot.

提案: Give a clear answer with a simple reason. Use correct vocabulary and avoid hesitations. Say when you send emails and why, with one concrete explanation. Keep sentences short and coherent, using linking words like because or so.

例: I usually send emails in the morning because I feel more focused then. For instance, I plan my day in the morning and can write clearer messages, so recipients get useful, well-organized emails.

提案: Use accurate vocabulary and give a specific reason or example. Replace incorrect words (frostproof, individual, setting) with appropriate terms (fast-paced development, individuals, sending). Link your ideas: state trend, give cause and an example.

例: Yes, email has become increasingly common in China because of fast-paced economic and technological development. For example, many professionals and students use email to share documents and official information, especially in workplaces and universities.

提案: Be clear about your prediction and give specific reasons and an example. Use correct collocations (casual communication, professional use, instant messaging, collaborative platforms). Structure: one sentence for prediction, one for reasons, one example if needed.

例: I think email will become less popular for casual use but remain important for formal and professional communication. This is because instant messaging apps and collaborative platforms are faster for everyday chats, while companies will still use email for official correspondence and document sharing.

× But I often send emails to my friends especially when they ask for suggestions on their daily life like when they chap in study.

✓ I often send emails to my friends, especially when they ask for suggestions about their daily lives, for example when they need help with studying.

The original sentence has incorrect word choice ('chap' should be 'struggle' or 'need help') and plural/singular and article issues. 'Daily life' should be pluralized to 'daily lives' to match 'friends'. 'Like when they chap in study' is unclear; replace with 'for example when they need help with studying'. Suggestions: use precise verbs and ensure noun number agreement. Grammar problem type ID:1

× I prefer like to offer the suggestion by writing a letter to them and send an e-mail to them which help them a lot.

✓ I prefer to offer suggestions by writing emails to them, which helps them a lot.

Remove the filler 'like' after 'prefer'. 'Suggestion' should be plural 'suggestions' to match general meaning. Use parallel verb forms: 'offer suggestions by writing emails' and 'which helps' (singular verb 'helps' agrees with 'writing emails' as a singular action). Also use 'emails' instead of 'a letter and send an e-mail to them' for clarity. Grammar problem types: 8 (verb + -ing), 13 (adjective/adverb) and 27 (subject-verb agreement). Grammar problem type ID:8

× I'm so proud of that.

✓ I'm very proud of that.

'So' is acceptable but 'very' is more natural here; no tense change needed. Main issue is register/style rather than grammar. Keep contractions consistent. Grammar problem type ID:13

× I often send emails in the morning because I sing a.

✓ I often send emails in the morning because I feel more focused then.

Original 'I sing a.' is incoherent—likely a mispronunciation or wrong word. Replace with a clear reason that fits context, e.g., 'I feel more focused then.' Ensure sentence completes thought. Grammar problem type ID:26

× The during the morning time is the best time to remember something and may uh, maybe I have a clear sword to organize my language, which set a great.

✓ Mornings are the best time to remember things, and I am usually clearer in organizing my thoughts then, which works well.

Original has article misuse ('The during the morning time'), awkward phrasing ('clear sword' should be 'clear head' or 'clear mind'), verb forms ('set a great' incomplete). Correct by using plural 'mornings' and correct nouns 'things', 'clearer', and 'thoughts'. Grammar problem types: 11 (prepositions/articles), 13 (word choice), 26 (sentence structure). Grammar problem type ID:11

× Yeah, sending e-mail has become increasingly prevalent in China.

✓ Yes, sending email has become increasingly prevalent in China.

Use 'Yes' instead of colloquial 'Yeah' for formality; 'email' can be uncountable and is commonly written without a hyphen. Article is fine; minor style change. Grammar problem type ID:22

× With the frostproof development and technology, many individual to exchange their thought through setting e-mail.

✓ With rapid development in technology, many individuals exchange their thoughts by sending email.

'Frostproof' is incorrect; the intended word is likely 'rapid' or 'fast'. Use plural 'individuals' and plural 'thoughts'. Use the verb 'exchange' with 'by sending email' for correct collocation. Grammar problem types: 13 (word choice), 1 (singular/plural), 11 (preposition use). Grammar problem type ID:13

× I think e-mail will become somehow less popular for casual communication because we remain important for former and professional use.

✓ I think email will become somewhat less popular for casual communication because it will remain important for formal and professional use.

'Somehow' -> 'somewhat'. 'We remain important for former' is incorrect; subject should be 'it' (email) and 'formal' not 'former'. Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'it will remain'. Grammar problem types: 7 (future tense), 13 (word choice), 27 (subject-verb agreement). Grammar problem type ID:7

× Also, instance messaging and collaborative platform offer foster more information.

✓ Also, instant messaging and collaborative platforms facilitate faster information sharing.

'Instance' should be 'instant'; 'platform' should be plural 'platforms' to match 'offer'. 'Offer foster more information' is ungrammatical; replace with 'facilitate faster information sharing' to express meaning clearly. Grammar problem types: 13 (word choice), 1 (plural), 26 (sentence structure). Grammar problem type ID:13