Emails— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够直接且含糊，有多处语法和词汇错误（如“trust any mouse”、“stay this much”），句子冗长且衔接差。建议：1) 直接回答问题（Yes/No + 简短原因）；2) 用明确理由和具体例子支持观点；3) 避免无意义填充词（umm, uh），控制在最多5句内；4) 使用合适词汇（e.g. prefer, convenient, messaging apps）。举例结构：主题句 + 1-2个支持细节。

例: No, I don't often send emails because I usually communicate with friends in person or via WeChat. For informal messages WeChat is faster and more convenient, so I rarely use email except for formal or official matters.

提案: 回答含义可理解但表达混乱、语法错误较多（时态、主谓一致、插入语不当）。建议：1) 开头用明确主题句（e.g. I send emails when...）；2) 用并列或列举方式说明具体场景并用连接词（for example, such as）；3) 改正语法（teachers want → teachers want me to, editors request → editors often ask）。

例: I usually send emails for formal purposes. For example, I email my teachers to submit important documents, and I also email journal editors when I submit or revise a paper.

提案: 回答不直接且缺乏清晰组织，含糊其辞。建议：1) 给出直接判断（Yes/No + 程度）；2) 提供具体原因和比较（e.g. mobile apps vs email）；3) 避免重复和填充词，使用连词使句子连贯（however, but, because）；4) 给出一个具体情境说明何时会用电子邮件。

例: Email is less popular for daily chat in China because most people use WeChat or QQ for instant messaging. However, people still use email for official matters like applying for jobs or contacting universities.

提案: 观点明确但表达重复、语法和词汇使用有问题。建议：1) 开头用明确预测句（I think...）；2) 用原因-结果结构解释为何会变化并举例支持；3) 去掉重复词并改进措辞（e.g. students lack university contacts → contact admissions）；4) 控制长度并使用连接词（because, so, for example）。

例: I think email use may stay the same or even increase for formal communication. For example, students who want to apply to universities often need to email admissions offices or professors when they don't have personal contacts.

× Umm, no, I don't trust any mouse because, umm, at the most moment we can talk about with my friends face to face and sometimes I will uh, use WeChat to talk about with others.

✓ Umm, no. I don't trust email much because, at most times we can talk with my friends face to face, and sometimes I use WeChat to talk with others.

原句中有代词和名词使用不当：使用了“mouse”显然是错误的单词，应为“email”或“e-mail”；“at the most moment”搭配错误，应该是“at most times”或“most of the time”；“talk about with my friends”中的“about”多余，应直接用“talk with my friends”。建议多注意常用搭配和代词指称，确认词汇拼写及固定表达。

× If teacher want me to collect some important documents I will use emails and other times if I want to.

✓ If a teacher wants me to collect some important documents, I will use email, and other times I won't.

原句中介词与冠词使用不当：“If teacher”缺少不定冠词，正确为“If a teacher”；“emails”作不可数名词时通常用“email”表示电子邮件这个方式；句尾“and other times if I want to”不完整，需明确否定或肯定。建议注意冠词用法及内容完整性。

× Editors, If I want to put my paper and edit, editors will ask.

✓ If I want to submit my paper for editing, the editors will ask for it.

原句结构混乱且主谓一致不清楚。需要将动词形式和主语对齐：“editors will ask”可以保留，但要加上宾语和明确动作，建议把句子改为“If I want to submit my paper for editing, the editors will ask for it.”。注意句子顺序和动词搭配。

× Uh, I don't know this question because I think most Chinese like to use WeChat and QQ to communicate with others on less, but if we don't have a, a collection, uh, connection way to uh.

✓ Uh, I'm not sure about this question. I think most Chinese prefer to use WeChat and QQ to communicate, but if we don't have a connection, ...

原句中代词和表达不自然：“I don't know this question”应为“I'm not sure about this question”；“to communicate with others on less”不合语法，应该说“prefer to use... to communicate”或“use ... more”;“a collection, a connection way”混淆词语，正确为“a connection”或“a way to connect”。建议练习固定短语如“be sure about”，“prefer to do sth.”并避免直译。

× I think sending emails will become more popular because now many many students want to enter enter a good university but they don't have teachers connection with so they must use e-mail to find to find the.

✓ I think sending emails will become more popular because many students want to enter a good university but they don't have connections with teachers, so they must use email to find them.

原句中时态和词序有问题：“want to enter enter”有重复单词，应为“want to enter”；“they don't have teachers connection with”应改为“they don't have connections with teachers”或“they don't have teacher connections”；句尾“to find to find the”不完整，需补上宾语。建议注意主谓宾完整性和常见搭配如“connections with someone”。