Emails— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答需更直接并注意语法与句子连贯。先给出主题句（是否经常发邮件），然后用1-2句说明原因，避免重复表达，注意时态和冠词，用更地道的短语（例如 'apply for a master's program'）。

例: I don't often send emails. In China people mostly use apps like WeChat, but recently I've started using email more because I'm applying for a master's program abroad and need to contact universities.

提案: 回答要更有条理：先陈述用途，再给出具体例子，注意语法（例如 'I was born with an eye condition'，'I needed special assistance'），避免冗长或不准确的词语。

例: I usually send emails for formal matters. For example, a few months ago I emailed an institution to request special assistance during exams because I was born with an eye condition and needed accommodations.

提案: 回答应该更自信简洁，减少口头填充词（uh, umm），并用准确表达（例如 'apps like WeChat or Dingtalk' 而非不确定的应用名）。可以补充一两句具体对比。

例: I don't think email is very popular in China. Most people prefer instant messaging apps like WeChat or work platforms such as Dingtalk for daily communication.

提案: 回答要逻辑清晰并注意句子准确性，先给结论再说明原因，避免重复和语法错误（例如 'less popular'，'because'，'short video platforms like TikTok'）。保持句子简短明了。

例: I think email will become less popular in the future because faster mobile networks and social apps make instant messaging and short video platforms like TikTok more convenient for communication.

× And to be honest with you, I never sent any e-mail before 'cause it's not common in China, but currently I'm applying for mastery in other countries, so I need to use e-mail to applying for offer, so I need use it more often.

✓ To be honest, I have never sent any e-mail before because it's not common in China. Now I'm applying for master's programs in other countries, so I need to use e-mail to apply for offers and I need to use it more often.

使用现在完成时表述“以前从未做过”的经验应该用现在完成时（have never sent），而不是一般过去时（never sent）。另外句中不定式使用错误：'to applying' 应为 'to apply'。还有 'mastery' 用词不当，应为 'master's programs' 或 'graduate programs'。建议：在描述过去发生到现在仍相关的经历时使用现在完成时；不定式后接动词要用原形；注意名词搭配。

× I remember that the last time I sent e-mail is several months ago.

✓ I remember that the last time I sent an e-mail was several months ago.

这里应使用一般过去时表示具体过去时间，且系动词应为过去式 'was' 而不是 'is'。另外 'e-mail' 前需要不定冠词 'an'。建议：提到具体过去时间点时用过去时，并注意冠词使用。

× I sent a e-mail to else institution to apply for special help for me because I'm born with eye disease so I need to some special help in the exam.

✓ I sent an e-mail to another institution to request special assistance because I was born with an eye condition, so I need some special arrangements for the exam.

原句中 'a e-mail' 冠词使用错误，应为 'an e-mail'；'else institution' 用法不对，应为 'another institution'；'apply for special help for me' 表达冗余且动词搭配不当，改为 'request special assistance' 更自然；'I'm born with' 时态和表达不当，描述出生的状况用过去或现在完成短语更自然，此处改为 'I was born with an eye condition'；'need to some special help' 中多余 'to' 且量词错误，改为 'need some special arrangements'。建议：注意代词与限定词用法，使用自然搭配，修正时态和冠词。

× Umm, people, uh, you always use other apps like WeChat or Flightbook into work or study.

✓ Umm, people usually use other apps like WeChat or Flightbook for work or study.

原句中 'you' 不与主语 'people' 匹配且语气不自然；'into work or study' 介词使用错误，应为 'for work or study'，表示用途。建议：使用 'people usually' 或 'people often' 来表达一般情况，介词搭配用 'for' 表示目的。

× I think e-mail will be less probably in the future cause with the development of technology like 5G people can check or send e-mail sent message very quickly by using other apps like WeChat and recently people are using the Tiktok to.

✓ I think e-mail will probably be less popular in the future because with the development of technologies like 5G people can check or send messages very quickly using other apps like WeChat, and recently people have been using TikTok as well.

句中 'less probably' 顺序和词汇错误，应为 'probably less popular' 或 'less popular'；'cause' 应写为正式 'because'；'check or send e-mail sent message' 语序混乱，应该简化为 'check or send messages'；'using other apps like WeChat' 更为简洁；表述最近的变化可用现在完成进行时 'have been using'。另外 'the Tiktok' 冠词不需使用且拼写 'TikTok'。建议：注意副词与形容词的顺序，使用合适时态（表示趋势用将来或现在完成进行时），并保持词汇简洁准确。