Emails— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and directly answer the question first, then add one or two specific supporting details. Reduce fillers (umm) and avoid repetition. Use linking words to make the response coherent, for example “because” or “so”. Aim for 2–4 sentences total.

例: Yes, I send emails quite often because I work as an HR intern at a software company. I regularly email colleagues about meeting arrangements and paperwork, and I also contact supervisors to confirm details when needed.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then give specific examples and use linking words such as “for example” or “also” to organize your points. Remove fillers and correct small grammar issues (e.g. “interview messages”). Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

例: I send emails mainly for formal work reasons. For example, I email employees about policy updates and interview schedules, and I also write to supervisors to verify information before it is published.

提案: Avoid starting with uncertainty; if you are unsure, say so briefly then provide a relevant comparison. Use clear linking words such as “however” or “on the other hand” and provide specific examples (which apps or situations). Limit to 2–3 sentences and remove fillers.

例: I'm not very sure about mainland China, but in Taiwan email is still common for work-related matters. For casual conversations people usually prefer messaging apps like LINE or WeChat instead of email.

提案: Make a clear prediction in one sentence and then support it with one reason and a brief comparison. Use linking words such as “because” and “however.” Remove repetitive phrases and fillers. Aim for 2–3 concise sentences.

例: I think email will remain important for formal communication but its everyday use may decline because messaging apps are more direct and convenient. However, emails will still be used for official records and long-form messages.

× Umm, I'm working as an intern in a software company.

✓ Umm, I work as an intern in a software company.

Present continuous 'I'm working' implies a temporary ongoing action; while acceptable, 'I work' (simple present) is more natural for stating one's position. Use simple present for regular employment. Suggestion: use 'I work as an intern' to describe your role.

× Umm, I'm in the human resources department, so I have to send e-mail to other employees for, umm, some terms of work occasions.

✓ Umm, I'm in the human resources department, so I have to send emails to other employees for certain work-related matters.

Use plural 'emails' rather than 'e-mail' when referring generally (see article/number usage). Also 'some terms of work occasions' is unidiomatic; 'certain work-related matters' is clearer. This corrects verb-noun usage and phrasing. Suggestion: use plural 'emails' and replace unclear phrase with 'work-related matters.'

× Like I said, umm I'm sending emails to employees for umm policy updates and sometimes for interviewing message to others umm I also send the e-mail to supervisors to check on the accuracy of the information.

✓ Like I said, I send emails to employees about policy updates and sometimes interview invitations; I also send emails to supervisors to check the accuracy of the information.

Inconsistent tense: 'I'm sending' (present continuous) and 'I also send' (simple present) should be consistent when describing habitual actions. Use simple present 'I send' for regular activities. 'Interviewing message to others' is ungrammatical—use 'interview invitations' or 'messages about interviews.' Also use plural 'emails.' Suggestion: use simple present and clearer nouns like 'interview invitations.'

× Umm, I'm not familiar with uh, sending emails in China, but umm, here in Taiwan we do send emails for work occasions, umm, for umm, casual conversations.

✓ Umm, I'm not familiar with sending emails in China, but here in Taiwan we do send emails for work and for casual conversations.

'Send emails in China' is acceptable, but 'for work occasions' is awkward; use 'for work' or 'for work purposes.' Also remove extra commas. Simplify 'for umm, casual conversations' to 'for casual conversations.' Suggestion: use 'for work' and 'for casual conversations.'

× We use our phones with interacting apps.

✓ We use our phones with messaging apps.

'Interacting apps' is not a standard collocation. The intended meaning is 'messaging apps.' Use correct noun 'messaging apps' which commonly collocates with 'phones.' Suggestion: replace 'interacting apps' with 'messaging apps.'

× I suppose sending emails will be more or less popular in the future umm, due to the rapid development of technology recently, umm sending emails is more convenient and umm messaging apps nowadays is more umm direct and straightforward.

✓ I suppose sending emails will be at least somewhat popular in the future. Due to the rapid development of technology, sending emails is convenient, and messaging apps nowadays are more direct and straightforward.

Multiple issues: 'messaging apps nowadays is' has subject-verb agreement error—'apps' require 'are' (Grammar problem type 27 as well). 'Due to the rapid development of technology recently' is redundant; use 'due to the rapid development of technology.' Also split into two sentences for clarity and adjust 'more or less popular' to 'at least somewhat popular.' Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement ('apps are') and avoid redundancy.

× ...messaging apps nowadays is more umm direct and straightforward.

✓ ...messaging apps nowadays are more direct and straightforward.

Subject 'messaging apps' is plural, so use plural verb 'are' instead of 'is.' This is a subject-verb agreement error. Suggestion: always match verb number to subject number.