Emails— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ следует сделать короче и более естественным. Начните с прямого утверждения (Yes/No + frequency), затем кратко объясните причину используя связующие слова (because, so, therefore). Избегайте лишних слов и повторов, исправьте грамматические ошибки («social media», «it’s a strange idea»).

例: I rarely send emails. I prefer messaging apps like Telegram and Instagram because they are faster and more convenient for everyday communication.

提案: Ответ должен быть ясным и содержать конкретные времена и причины. Не используйте неразборчивые звуки («UH-7 UH»). Укажите точные периоды и причины (например, для учёбы или официальных вопросов) и свяжите предложения словами «for example», «usually».

例: I usually send emails in the morning, between 7 and 11 AM, to communicate with teachers about assignments. I also sometimes send emails in the evening for minor matters or follow-ups.

提案: Ответ неясный и содержит ошибки лексики и грамматики. Сформулируйте мнение напрямую и приведите конкретное объяснение или пример приложений (WeChat, QQ). Используйте связки («in my opinion», «because», «for example») и избегайте неопределённых слов («feature», «a lot of opportunities for»).

例: In my opinion, emails are less popular in China because people mainly use apps like WeChat and QQ for messaging and work communication. For example, many companies use WeChat groups to share information instead of email.

提案: Ответ можно улучшить, сделав утверждение короче и добавив причину и возможное исключение. Избегайте повтора «I think» и некорректных конструкций («majority for all people»). Используйте связки («because», «however», «for example») и конкретные прогнозы.

例: I think emails will become less popular because people prefer instant messaging on platforms like Telegram and Instagram. However, emails will still be used for formal communication, such as job applications and official notices.

× So actually I can say that I rarely send emails or letters because for me it's very strange idea because nowadays we have a lot of interesting social medias and apps such as Telegram and Instagram, which can provide a lot of chance to write.

✓ So actually I can say that I rarely send emails or letters because, for me, it's a very strange idea, because nowadays we have a lot of interesting social media and apps such as Telegram and Instagram, which can provide many opportunities to write.

The errors include incorrect articles and uncountable/plural noun usage. 'a very strange idea' needs the indefinite article 'a'. 'social medias' is incorrect; 'social media' is an uncountable plural collective noun. 'a lot of chance' is wrong; use 'many opportunities' or 'a lot of opportunities'. Also commas improve readability.

× I usually send emails during my school's daily routine. For example, I think it's about UH-7 UH to 11 AM. I also use e-mail in the evening for less materials.

✓ I usually send emails during my school's daily routine. For example, I think it's about 7 to 11 AM. I also use email in the evening for fewer materials.

Time expression should be '7 to 11 AM' not 'UH-7 UH to 11 AM' (typo/transcription). 'E-mail' vs 'email' both acceptable; consistency preferred. 'Less materials' is incorrect because 'materials' is countable; use the comparative 'fewer materials'. If meaning uncountable content, use 'less content'.

× So in my opinion, people in China aren't sending emails because I know that there are one of the most popular app for sending emails or maybe messages.

✓ So in my opinion, people in China don't send emails because I know that one of the most popular apps for sending messages is WeChat.

Problems: incorrect continuous negative 'aren't sending' (general habit uses simple present), 'there are one of the most popular app' is ungrammatical—should be 'one of the most popular apps'. Pronoun/reference unclear; 'WeChat' likely intended instead of 'feature'. Use 'don't send' for habitual actions and correct noun agreement.

× It's called feature and there are a lot of opportunities for.

✓ It's called WeChat, and it offers a lot of features and opportunities for communication.

Original sentence is fragmentary and vague. 'Called feature' is wrong; needs the app name. 'There are a lot of opportunities for' is incomplete—'for communication' or 'for messaging' needed. Rephrase to complete the idea and fix noun usage.

× So I think that sending emails will be less popular in the future because nowadays we have a lot of interesting social media and I think that it can transform to other more popular and majority for all people in the world, like maybe Telegram or Instagram.

✓ So I think that sending emails will be less popular in the future because nowadays we have a lot of interesting social media, and I think people will switch to other more popular platforms used by the majority worldwide, like Telegram or Instagram.

Problems: awkward and incorrect phrasing 'transform to other more popular and majority for all people'; use 'people will switch to' and 'platforms used by the majority worldwide'. Maintain future tense 'will be' and ensure subject-verb clarity. Also 'social media' is the correct form.