Emails— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct some minor grammar issues. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid redundancy (e.g., “I don't often send a lot of emails” is repetitive).

例: No, I don't send many emails. Instead, I mainly use phone calls and WeChat because they are faster for everyday conversations, so email isn't necessary for me.

提案: This answer is unclear and contains many errors. Provide a direct topic sentence answering when you send emails, then give a specific situation and use linking words to clarify. Keep it to 1–3 concise sentences.

例: I usually send emails during working hours, especially in the morning. For example, I email colleagues about tasks or meeting agendas so they have time to prepare.

提案: Good content and clear opinion, but fix repetition and small phrasing issues. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail and a linking word. Vary vocabulary (e.g., use “common” or “widely used”) and avoid repeating phrases.

例: Yes, email is still widely used in China. For instance, students and professionals use email for formal communication, and it is useful when you need to send long or detailed information.

提案: Clear idea and good reasoning, but correct small grammar issues and avoid repeating the same point twice. Give one concrete example of alternatives and use linking words for coherence.

例: I think email will become less popular because instant messaging and video calls are more immediate. For example, many companies now use chat apps for quick coordination, which reduces the need for email.

× Most of my communication I do is through phone calls or by messaging people on WeChat, and this is all I really need to connect people.

✓ Most of my communication is through phone calls or by messaging people on WeChat, and this is all I really need to connect with people.

The original sentence contains an unnecessary inserted pronoun phrase 'I do' which disrupts structure. Use 'Most of my communication is...' for correct subject-verb structure and add the preposition 'with' after 'connect' to correctly link the object. Suggestion: remove redundant pronoun phrases and use 'connect with' when talking about communicating with people.

× Are you recent emails during working hours, typically in the morning or early afternoon when recipes are most likely? Read and respond.

✓ Are you recent emails during working hours, typically in the morning or early afternoon when replies are most likely?

This sentence is garbled and contains wrong words ('Are you', 'recipes', 'Read and respond') causing sentence structure errors. It should ask about when the student reads and replies to emails. Corrected to 'Are your recent emails read and replied to during working hours, typically in the morning or early afternoon when replies are most likely?' or simpler as provided. Suggestion: clarify subject and verb, choose correct vocabulary ('replies') and avoid extraneous phrases.

× Yeah, I think so. e-mail is quite popular with everyone in in China.

✓ Yeah, I think so. E-mail is quite popular with everyone in China.

There is a repeated preposition 'in in' and 'e-mail' should be capitalized at the sentence start. Also articles are not strictly required here but capitalization and duplication fix needed. Suggestion: remove duplicate words and capitalize sentence-initial word.

× People use e-mail at school, at work and to send a message to their friends and family.

✓ People use e-mail at school, at work, and to send messages to their friends and family.

Singular 'a message' sounds odd when speaking generally; plural 'messages' matches general statement. Also add comma before 'and' for clarity. Suggestion: use plural when referring to general habitual actions.

× e-mail is the quickest way to send a long message to someone, so it is very popular.

✓ E-mail is the quickest way to send a long message to someone, so it is very popular.

Only capitalization needed at sentence start. Pronoun use is fine. Suggestion: start sentence with capital letter.

× We are already seeing people emails less and use instant messenger or video calls instead.

✓ We are already seeing people email less and use instant messaging or video calls instead.

The phrase 'people emails less' is incorrect; 'people email less' uses 'email' as a verb in present tense. Also 'instant messenger' should be 'instant messaging' (the activity) or 'instant messenger apps'. Suggestion: use 'email' as verb and 'instant messaging' for the activity.

× I think this trend will continue and people will use e-mail less and less in the future.

✓ I think this trend will continue, and people will use e-mail less and less in the future.

Grammatically correct but needs a comma before 'and' to separate independent clauses. Tense is appropriate. Suggestion: add comma for clarity.