Emails— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct word choice; start with a clear topic sentence, avoid pronunciation/grammar errors and unnecessary phrases. Keep answer within 2–4 sentences and correct mistakes (e.g., “At is an A central tone” is unclear). Use linking words like “mainly” to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I send emails quite frequently. I mainly use them for professional purposes, such as contacting my college and submitting assignments, because email keeps records and looks more formal.

提案: Organize your response: give a clear topic sentence, then specific reasons with correct vocabulary and linking words. Replace incorrect verbs (e.g., “say important documents”) with accurate ones (e.g., “send important documents”); avoid hesitations and repetition.

例: I usually send emails when I need to deliver important documents or make formal inquiries. For example, I email instructors to submit assignments or ask about course details because email provides a written record for future reference.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence, then specific contrast with linking words. Avoid unclear phrases and repetition; use correct sentence forms and coherent reasoning. Don’t use incorrect fillers or mistranslated idioms (e.g., “Cadbury words”).

例: Yes, email is still popular in China, especially for business and official matters. However, for personal communication most people prefer instant messaging apps like WeChat because they are faster and more convenient.

提案: This answer is relatively clear but contains small errors and awkward phrasing. Use a concise topic sentence followed by two clear reasons linked with connectors (e.g., “because” / “however”). Correct grammar (“That says” → “That said”) and avoid extra words.

例: I think email will remain common in professional settings because it is formal and creates a reliable record. However, it will likely decline for personal use as more interactive platforms and social apps become increasingly popular.

× I've primarily used e-mail for professional purposes such as communicating with colleges or submitting assessments.

✓ I've primarily used e-mail for professional purposes such as communicating with colleges or submitting assessments.

No correction needed for prepositions here; sentence is grammatically acceptable. Keep 'for professional purposes' and 'for communicating with colleges' as they correctly express purpose.

× At is an A central tone for keeping my work organized and official.

✓ It is a central tool for keeping my work organized and official.

Original sentence has word order and word choice problems ('At is an A central tone'). Replaced with 'It is a central tool' to provide a clear subject and noun that fit context. Suggestion: ensure subject pronoun 'It' refers to 'e-mail' and use the appropriate noun ('tool') rather than 'tone'.

× I usually resort to emails when I need to say important documents or formal uh.

✓ I usually resort to emails when I need to send important documents or formal requests.

The verb 'say' is incorrect for this context; 'send' is the correct verb for transmitting documents by email. Also completed the sentence by replacing the filler 'uh' and adding a suitable object 'formal requests'. Suggestion: use verbs that match the action (send documents) and avoid fillers in formal responses.

× Inquiry inquiries is also my go to method when I want to ensure uh there's a written record of a conviction conversation for a few day reference.

✓ Email inquiries are also my go-to method when I want to ensure there's a written record of a conversation for future reference.

Multiple issues: 'Inquiry inquiries' is redundant; use 'Email inquiries'. 'Is' should agree with plural subject: 'are' if kept plural, but rephrased to 'are also my go-to method' or use singular. 'Go to' should be hyphenated as 'go-to'. 'Conviction conversation' is incorrect word choice; 'conversation' suffices. 'A few day reference' is wrong; use 'future reference'. Suggestion: choose correct collocations ('go-to method', 'future reference') and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× In the Cadbury words, absolutely.

✓ In other words, absolutely.

'Cadbury' is an incorrect word here, likely a mispronunciation of 'other'. Replace with 'other' to form the common phrase 'in other words'. Suggestion: use standard phrases and avoid incorrect proper nouns.

× However, for personal communication, most people there heavily rely on instant messaging apps like WeChat. WeChat.

✓ However, for personal communication, most people there heavily rely on instant messaging apps like WeChat.

The repeated 'WeChat. WeChat.' is redundant. Remove the duplicate. Suggestion: avoid unnecessary repetition and ensure sentences are concise.

× So why emails are the gold standard for business? There aren't. Come on for.

✓ So why aren't emails the gold standard for business? They are.

Original contains word order errors and nonsensical fragments. Form a correct question using subject-auxiliary inversion: 'Why aren't emails...' and provide a coherent answer 'They are.' Suggestion: ensure proper question inversion in English and respond with clear, relevant content.

× That says, I expect it to be become less popular for personal use as factor more interactive platforms continue to overshadow traditional e-mail.

✓ That said, I expect it to become less popular for personal use as more interactive platforms continue to overshadow traditional e-mail.

'That says' is incorrect; use 'That said' to introduce contrast. Remove extra 'be' in 'to be become' — correct is 'to become'. 'Factor' is incorrect insertion; remove it. Suggestion: use correct transitional phrase 'That said', ensure infinitive form 'to become', and avoid stray words.