Art— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: आपके उत्तर में कुछ व्याकरणिक त्रुटियाँ हैं जैसे 'playing musical instrument' के बजाय 'playing musical instruments' होना चाहिए। इसके अलावा, 'artist and designers' की जगह 'artists and designers' होना चाहिए। आप अपने उत्तर को थोड़ा और प्राकृतिक और प्रवाहपूर्ण बनाने के लिए इन त्रुटियों को सुधारें।

例: No, I don't really enjoy drawing very much because I'm more interested in other forms of art, such as music and crafts. For example, I love playing musical instruments and making handmade items, which I find both relaxing and a great way to express my creativity. However, I do appreciate the detailed and inspiring work of artists and designers, especially in fashion.

提案: आपके उत्तर में 'your creativity' का उपयोग संदर्भ के लिए उपयुक्त नहीं है क्योंकि आप स्वयं की बात कर रहे हैं। इसे 'the creativity' या 'the artists' creativity' से बदलें। इसके अलावा, आप उत्तर को और अधिक प्रभावी बनाने के लिए कुछ लिंकिंग शब्द जोड़ सकते हैं।

例: Yes, I really enjoy going to art galleries because they display fascinating artifacts and various forms of art, such as paintings, sculptures, and drawings. These artworks often evoke strong emotions in me and help me connect with different cultures and histories. Moreover, visiting galleries is a peaceful experience that allows me to appreciate the artists' creativity and feel inspired.

提案: आपका उत्तर स्पष्ट और संगठित है, लेकिन आप 'programming and problem solving' के बजाय 'programming and problem-solving' लिख सकते हैं। इसके अलावा, आप कुछ और विशिष्ट उदाहरण जोड़ सकते हैं जिससे उत्तर और अधिक समृद्ध हो।

例: No, I'm not interested in learning about art because I'm more passionate about fields like programming and problem-solving, which I find more challenging and rewarding. However, if I get the opportunity in the future, I would like to explore some forms of art, such as painting and sculpture, to broaden my horizons and develop a better understanding of creative expression.

提案: आपके उत्तर में 'different types of trends such as lens caps and natural paintings' स्पष्ट नहीं है और 'quite more dashed' भी गलत वाक्यांश है। आप इसे सरल और स्पष्ट बनाएं, जैसे कि आपने कौन-कौन से चित्र बनाए और आपकी वर्तमान स्थिति क्या है।

例: Yes, I learned drawing when I was a child because it was part of my school curriculum. I was always very curious and enjoyed creating different types of drawings, such as landscapes and still life, which helped me develop my creativity. However, nowadays my drawing skills have declined, but I still appreciate the effort I put into it.

× I love playing musical instrument and making handmade items, which I find both relaxing and a great way to express my creativity.

✓ I love playing musical instruments and making handmade items, which I find both relaxing and a great way to express my creativity.

The noun 'instrument' should be plural 'instruments' because it refers to musical instruments in general, not just one. Using the plural form is appropriate when talking about a category or multiple items.

× I do appreciate the detailed and inspiring work of artist and designers, especially in fashion.

✓ I do appreciate the detailed and inspiring work of artists and designers, especially in fashion.

Both 'artist' and 'designers' should be in plural form to correctly refer to multiple people. Consistency in number is important when listing multiple groups.

× Visiting galleries is a peaceful experience that allows me to appreciate your creativity and feel inspired.

✓ Visiting galleries is a peaceful experience that allows me to appreciate their creativity and feel inspired.

The pronoun 'your' is incorrect here because the speaker is talking about the creativity of artists or creators in general, not directly addressing the listener. 'Their' is the correct possessive pronoun to refer to third persons.

× I was always very curious and enjoyed creating different types of trends such as lens caps and natural paintings, which helped me develop my creativity.

✓ I was always very curious and enjoyed creating different types of things such as lens caps and natural paintings, which helped me develop my creativity.

The word 'trends' is incorrect in this context because 'lens caps' and 'natural paintings' are objects or items, not trends. Replacing 'trends' with 'things' or 'items' is more appropriate.

× However, nowadays my drawing skills are quite more dashed, but I still appreciate the effort.

✓ However, nowadays my drawing skills are quite poor, but I still appreciate the effort.

The phrase 'quite more dashed' is incorrect and unclear. 'Dashed' is not used to describe skills. The adjective 'poor' correctly describes low skill level. Also, 'quite' and 'more' should not be used together here.