Art— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达不够清晰，语法和词汇使用存在错误，且内容重复，缺乏连贯性。建议简洁明了地表达观点，避免重复，并使用正确的词汇和句式。

例: I don't like drawing because I find it difficult to create accurate shapes, which makes me feel frustrated. Therefore, I usually avoid trying it.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够自然，且句子结构混乱。建议使用简单明了的句子，注意时态和主谓一致，并合理使用连接词。

例: Yes, I often visit galleries with my friends because it helps us expand our horizons and improve our drawing skills. Even though I don't enjoy drawing much, I want to learn and get better.

提案: 回答内容有一定的逻辑，但语法和词汇使用不准确，且有重复词汇。建议简化句子，使用准确的词汇表达观点，并避免重复。

例: Yes, I want to learn Chinese ink painting because it depicts our country's landscapes and helps promote our culture. I believe learning it will deepen my understanding of art.

提案: 回答表达基本清楚，但存在语法错误和重复词汇。建议注意时态一致，避免重复，并用更自然的表达方式。

例: Yes, when I was young, my mother took me to art lessons where I learned about different kinds of art, including Chinese ink painting, which is my favorite.

× I don't like drawing because I'm not talented in joy.

✓ I don't like drawing because I'm not talented in it.

这里的介词使用错误，'talented in joy'不合适，应该用'talented in it'来指代绘画。

× I think joy is difficult for me and I don't to join a accurate shape and it make me a feel.

✓ I think drawing is difficult for me and I don't want to draw accurate shapes because it makes me feel bad.

句中'joy'用错，应该是'drawing'；'I don't to join'缺少动词，应该是'I don't want to draw'；'a accurate shape'形容词用错，应该是'an accurate shape'；'it make me a feel'结构错误，应该是'it makes me feel bad'。

× It make me feel, uh, difficult and uh, I don't want to try, try to try.

✓ It makes me feel, uh, frustrated and, uh, I don't want to try, try to try.

主谓不一致，'It make'应为'It makes'；'feel difficult'表达不自然，改为'feel frustrated'更合适。

× Of course I always with my friend to visit the gallery because I think it's a good way to help them have ours to expand our horizon and improve our drawing skills.

✓ Of course I always go with my friends to visit the gallery because I think it's a good way to help us expand our horizons and improve our drawing skills.

缺少动词'go'；'friend'应为复数'friends'；'help them have ours'表达错误，改为'help us'；'horizon'应为复数'horizons'。

× Even if I didn't like to join, but I really want to learn it and to improve.

✓ Even if I don't like to join, I really want to learn it and improve.

'Even if'和'but'不能同时使用，二者逻辑重复，应去掉'but'；时态应保持一致，改为现在时。

× Of course I want to learn about Chinese ink painting because this painting is show a our country's landscapes and I think it is good way to to to improve our country's cultures.

✓ Of course I want to learn about Chinese ink painting because this painting shows our country's landscapes and I think it is a good way to improve our country's culture.

'is show'应为'shows'；'a our country's'错误，去掉'a'；'cultures'应为单数'culture'。

× Of course when I was young my mother take me in art lessons and I learnt about a different different kind of art such as Chinese ink or some sub subject art that my favorite kind is Chinese ink.

✓ Of course when I was young my mother took me to art lessons and I learnt about different kinds of art such as Chinese ink and some other subjects. My favorite kind is Chinese ink.

动词时态错误，'take'应为过去式'took'；'take me in art lessons'介词错误，应为'took me to art lessons'；'a different different kind'重复且冠词错误，应为'different kinds'；句子结构混乱，需拆分成两句。