Art— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevabınızda daha doğal ve akıcı ifadeler kullanmalısınız. Gereksiz tekrarları ve dolgu kelimelerini azaltarak, cümlenizi doğrudan ve net kurmalısınız. Ayrıca, 'depend' kelimesini doğru şekilde 'depends' olarak kullanmalı ve cümlenizi daha kısa ve etkili yapmalısınız.

例: Yes, I like drawing, especially during my free time. I prefer to draw peaceful scenes, such as nature and wildlife, because they help me relax.

提案: Cümlenizde dilbilgisi hataları ve anlamsal belirsizlikler var. Daha doğru ve doğal cümle yapıları kullanmalısınız. Ayrıca, bağlaçlar ve geçiş ifadeleri ile cümlenizi daha tutarlı hale getirebilirsiniz.

例: I like going to galleries, but I prefer not to go alone. I enjoy these activities more when I am with my friends or family because it makes the experience more exciting.

提案: Cümleniz çok dağınık ve tekrarlamalar içeriyor. Daha açık ve net ifadeler kullanarak düşüncelerinizi daha iyi ifade etmelisiniz. Ayrıca, 'arts is miracle' ifadesi yerine daha uygun bir ifade tercih etmelisiniz.

例: Yes, I want to learn more about art because I find it fascinating. I would like to improve my skills and try new techniques in the future.

提案: Cümlenizde gereksiz dolgu kelimeleri var ve cümle yapısı biraz basit. Daha akıcı ve doğal cümleler kurmaya çalışın. Ayrıca, daha fazla detay vererek cevabınızı zenginleştirebilirsiniz.

例: Yes, when I was a child, I used to draw natural scenes with my friends and teacher at school. It was a fun way to express my creativity.

× I think it's depend.

✓ I think it depends.

The verb 'depend' requires the third person singular form 'depends' when used with 'it'. This is a subject-verb agreement issue involving modal verb usage in the present tense.

× I will prefer to drawing sometimes like uh, peaceful things such as, uh, natural life.

✓ I will prefer to draw sometimes, like peaceful things such as natural life.

After 'prefer to', the base form of the verb should be used, not the '-ing' form. Therefore, 'to drawing' should be corrected to 'to draw'.

× Go to gallery, but I prefer not go to alone.

✓ Go to the gallery, but I prefer not to go alone.

The noun 'gallery' requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific place. Also, 'prefer not go to alone' is incorrect; it should be 'prefer not to go alone' to include the infinitive marker 'to'.

× I prefer with my friends or my family because like these activities more excites with my friends or my family.

✓ I prefer to go with my friends or my family because I like these activities more when I am with them.

The original sentence misuses prepositions and lacks clarity. 'Prefer with' is incorrect; it should be 'prefer to go with'. Also, 'more excites with' is incorrect; the sentence is rephrased for clarity and correct preposition use.

× Because arts is miracle for me and I want to learn more things for art

✓ Because art is a miracle for me and I want to learn more about art

The word 'arts' should be singular 'art' when referring to the subject in general. Also, 'miracle' needs an article 'a' before it. 'Learn more things for art' is awkward; 'learn more about art' is the correct expression.