Talents— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够连贯，语法错误较多，表达不自然。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，明确表达自己的才能，并用具体例子支持。

例: I believe my talent is self-study. For example, I taught myself English and have been practicing bodybuilding and CrossFit for over ten years.

提案: 回答含糊且语法混乱，缺乏清晰的主题句和支持细节。建议直接回答问题，使用简单明了的句子，并说明具体时间和经历。

例: I discovered my talent for self-study when I was a child. At first, I was easily distracted, but over time I learned to focus better.

提案: 表达有一定逻辑，但用词不准确，句子重复。建议使用更准确的词汇，避免重复，并用具体理由支持观点。

例: Yes, I believe self-starting is very important for future work. As technology like artificial intelligence advances, we must continuously learn new skills to keep up.

提案: 回答不够清晰，语法错误较多，表达混乱。建议简洁明了地表达观点，避免语法错误，并用具体例子支持。

例: I don't think my family members share this talent because it's related to personality. However, my nephew is also good at self-starting and gets excellent grades at school.

× Oh in my opinion, I'm a person is good at is good at self study.

✓ Oh, in my opinion, I am a person who is good at self-study.

句子结构混乱，缺少连接词，导致表达不清晰。应使用关系代词"who"连接主语和定语从句，使句子完整通顺。

× So I learned I also had an English by myself and.

✓ So I learned English by myself.

句子结构不完整，"I also had an English"表达不正确且多余，应简化为"I learned English by myself"。

× I have down exercise for almost over 10 years and bodybuilding and CrossFit through my.

✓ I have been doing exercise, bodybuilding, and CrossFit for almost over 10 years.

句子结构混乱，"have down exercise"用词错误，应使用"have been doing exercise"表示持续动作，且句尾不完整，需补充完整内容。

× when there was a charge child, I don't think I found, I found, I didn't think I found my talent about self study

✓ When I was a child, I didn't think I had found my talent for self-study.

时态使用错误，描述过去事件应使用过去时，且"charge child"应为"child"，句子重复且不连贯，需简化并调整时态。

× I was interested in many things that can distract it, distract my attentions.

✓ I was interested in many things that could distract my attention.

"distract it"用法错误，应直接用"distract my attention"，且"attentions"应为不可数名词"attention"。

× So instead of starting.

✓ So instead of starting, I was distracted.

句子不完整，缺少谓语和宾语，导致表达不清晰，应补充完整句子。

× I think self starting is most of important ability for more than lives

✓ I think self-starting is the most important ability for modern life.

"most of important"用法错误，应为"the most important"，"more than lives"表达不当，应为"modern life"。

× you need you need to update yourself too. Improve yourself ability to use this technique.

✓ You need to update yourself too and improve your ability to use this technology.

"yourself ability"应为"your ability"，且"technique"在此语境下应为"technology"，连接词缺失，需用"and"连接两个动作。

× No, I don't think my family is from now with me because I I think that's a personality and it's not depends on your families members.

✓ No, I don't think my family shares this talent with me because I think it's a personality trait and it does not depend on family members.

"my family is from now with me"表达不清，改为"my family shares this talent with me"更准确；"it's not depends"时态错误，应为"it does not depend"；"families members"应为"family members"。

× But I found my nephew is is good at self starting and she also have a good score in her class and she's got in his class.

✓ But I found my nephew is good at self-starting and she also has a good score in her class.

"she also have"主谓不一致，应为"she also has"；"she's got in his class"表达不清，去掉该部分使句子完整且正确。