Talents— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it could be more concise and natural. Avoid repeating the same idea (remembering things) multiple times and try to use more varied vocabulary. Also, the example could be linked more smoothly to your main point using a linking phrase.

例: Yes, I have a strong talent for remembering details. For instance, I can recall events from my childhood vividly, such as when my 5th-grade teacher used to share her lunch with me.

提案: Your answer is understandable but a bit awkward and repetitive. Try to use clearer and more natural phrasing, and avoid repeating 'I have this talent in me.' Also, directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence and support it with a reason or example.

例: I believe I have had this talent since I was young because I have always been able to remember things easily throughout my life.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and ends abruptly. Make sure to finish your sentences and provide specific reasons or examples to support your opinion. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: Definitely, my talent for remembering things will be useful in my future work because it helps me learn quickly and stay organized, which are valuable skills in many jobs.

提案: Your answer is confusing because you mention both having the same talent and a short memory, which contradicts each other. Be clear and consistent in your response. Also, explain your point with more detail and use linking words to clarify your ideas.

例: Yes, my father also has a good memory, and I believe I inherited this ability from him, which helps me remember important information easily.

× I think this talent is inherited in me when I was young because as long as I can remember, I have this talent in me.

✓ I think this talent has been inherited by me since I was young because as long as I can remember, I have had this talent.

The original sentence incorrectly mixes present tense 'is inherited' with past time reference 'when I was young'. The correct form uses present perfect 'has been inherited' to indicate an action that started in the past and continues to the present. Also, 'inherited in me' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'inherited by me'. Additionally, 'I have this talent in me' should be 'I have had this talent' to reflect continuity from past to present.

× Remembering things is a very important talent to have because it can make you have a lot of job opportunities and.

✓ Remembering things is a very important talent to have because it can give you a lot of job opportunities.

The original sentence ends abruptly and uses 'make you have' which is awkward. The correction replaces 'make you have' with 'give you' for natural expression. Also, the sentence is completed properly. The tense is present and appropriate here.

× Yes, my father used to have the same talent about remembering things. He also had a very short memory.

✓ Yes, my father used to have the same talent for remembering things. He also had a very short memory.

The phrase 'talent about remembering things' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'talent for remembering things'. The past tense 'used to have' and 'had' are correctly used to describe past habits and states.